学习— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Make the answer more concise and structured: start with a direct topic sentence ("I'm currently a student"), then give one or two specific goals and a brief reason. Avoid repetition ("improve myself" / "improve my skills") and use clearer phrases (e.g. "a large company" instead of "big industry").

範例: I'm currently a student. After I graduate, I hope to work for a large company where I can develop my professional skills and gain experience in project management, because I want to progress quickly in my career.

建議: Provide a clear direct answer then two specific details. Say the institution (college) and your year, then briefly explain how you study (e.g. classes, home study) and what you're doing now. Correct grammar ("I'm a first-year student") and finish the sentence. Keep it to 2–3 sentences.

範例: I study at a local college and I'm a first-year student. I attend most lectures online and study at home, and right now I'm preparing for my second-semester exams.

建議: Answer directly then give specific reasons. Avoid unclear words and repetition. Correct noun/verb forms ("people" not "peoples") and remove irrelevant or confusing details ("instruments from dance") unless you explain them. Use linking words ("because","for example") to connect ideas.

範例: Yes, it's a good place to study because many of my classmates are motivated and talented. For example, studying alongside intelligent peers makes me more productive and encourages me to learn new skills such as teamwork and creative subjects like dance.

建議: Give one clear change and explain why with a specific example. Avoid contradicting statements (saying people are punctual then saying no punctuality). Use concise language: state the change, reason, and a short suggestion for improvement.

範例: I like my college, but I would improve the academic resources because our library and lab facilities are limited. For example, adding a well-stocked library and better computer labs would help students study more effectively and complete research projects on time.

建議: Start with a clear topic sentence about your plans, then give specific steps and a reason. Reduce hesitations and repetition. Mention concrete actions (taking courses, practicing speaking) and connect them to your goal (becoming cabin crew).

範例: My future plan is to become a cabin crew member, so I'm improving my English to become fluent. For example, I'm taking speaking courses, practicing with native speakers online, and studying aviation-related vocabulary to prepare for interviews and in-flight communication.

× Currently I'm a student, but in future after I graduate I want to work with a big industry where I can improve myself, improve my skills and do more work.

✓ Currently I'm a student, but in the future after I graduate I want to work for a large company where I can improve myself, develop my skills and gain more experience.

The sentence mixes informal word choice and preposition use. 'In future' should be 'in the future'. 'Work with a big industry' is incorrect collocation; use 'work for a large company' or 'work in industry'. 'Improve my skills and do more work' is awkward; 'develop my skills and gain more experience' is clearer and fits the future intention. Maintain present continuous for current status and simple future intention after 'after I graduate'.

× I study in college, I'm first student, first year student and doing my study at home.

✓ I study at college; I'm a first-year student and I am studying at home.

Use 'at college' rather than 'in college' in this context, and include the indefinite article 'a' before 'first-year student'. 'Doing my study at home' is ungrammatical; use 'I am studying at home'. Maintain present simple 'I study' for general fact and present continuous 'I am studying' for current activity.

× Currently I'm preparing for my exams second semester and.

✓ Currently I'm preparing for my second-semester exams.

Word order and article usage are incorrect. Use 'second-semester exams' as a compound noun and include 'my'. Remove the trailing 'and'. Present continuous 'I'm preparing' correctly indicates ongoing action.

× In my college, Suya is in in my college, it is a good place for a study.

✓ At my college, Suya is a student; it is a good place to study.

Avoid repeating 'in'. Use 'at my college' for location. 'Good place for a study' should be 'good place to study'. Clarify 'Suya is a student' if intended. Maintain present simple for general statements.

× They are peoples comes with very intelligent and studying with them I feel more productive myself to new new new things to learn more instruments from dance.

✓ Many people who come here are very intelligent, and studying with them makes me feel more productive and eager to learn new things, such as dance techniques.

'They are peoples comes with very intelligent' is ungrammatical: 'people' is plural and does not take 's'; use 'many people'. Use relative clause 'who come here' or similar. 'Studying with them I feel more productive myself' should be 'studying with them makes me feel more productive'. Remove redundant 'new new new'. 'Learn more instruments from dance' is unclear; 'learn new things, such as dance techniques' clarifies meaning. Correct pronoun and noun usage and verb form.

× I like my college, my college peoples are very punctual but I want to improve my college more because I think my college is not developed in studies more and I feel there is no punctuality in studies and not.

✓ I like my college; the people at my college are very punctual, but I want my college to improve academically because I think it is not well developed in terms of studies and there is a lack of punctuality in academic matters.

'College peoples' is incorrect; use 'the people at my college' or 'my classmates'. 'Improve my college more' should be 'I want my college to improve' or 'for my college to improve academically'. Avoid repeating 'my college'. 'Not developed in studies more' is ungrammatical; use 'not well developed in terms of studies'. Clarify 'no punctuality in studies and not' to 'a lack of punctuality in academic matters'. Fix pronoun and noun phrases and overall sentence structure.

× My, my future study plans are first. I'm uh, I am improving my English to make my English more fluent for future opportunities.

✓ My future study plans are as follows: first, I am improving my English to make it more fluent for future opportunities.

Remove filler repetitions 'my, my' and use a clear introducer 'My future study plans are as follows'. Use 'I am improving my English' (present continuous) and replace the repeated phrase 'make my English more fluent' with 'make it more fluent' to avoid repetition. This keeps tense consistent for current ongoing actions.

× I see my future in cabin crew so that's why I focusing on my English currently now.

✓ I see my future as a cabin crew member, so that's why I am focusing on my English right now.

Use 'as a cabin crew member' to indicate the role. 'That's why I focusing' is missing the auxiliary 'am' for present continuous; correct to 'I am focusing'. 'Currently now' is redundant; use 'right now' or 'currently'. Maintain present continuous for ongoing action.