学习— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be concise and avoid small redundancies (e.g., “in the past” with “used to”). Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one specific supporting detail. Maintain sentence variety but keep to at most 3–4 sentences.

範例: I’m a university student majoring in statistics and computer science. Previously, I worked as a nurse, but I returned to school to change careers and gain more technical skills.

建議: Make the main idea upfront (topic sentence) and streamline phrasing. Replace vague words like “starting at” with clearer verbs and avoid overlong compound sentences. Use one linking word to show contrast.

範例: I usually study at the public library near my home because it’s convenient. However, if it’s closed, I go to a nearby study café and buy a day pass.

建議: Begin with a full topic sentence rather than a single word. Correct unclear phrasing (“write away” is incorrect) and be more specific about benefits. Use one linking word to add the second supporting point.

範例: Yes, it’s an excellent place to study because it offers a separate laptop room ideal for my coding assignments. In addition, the library’s reference section makes it easy to find technical books when I need them.

建議: Avoid grammatical errors and unfinished sentences. Use a clear topic sentence, then give a specific change with a reason. Correct tense and article usage and finish your thought.

範例: I’m generally satisfied with the library, but I wish it were open more often. For example, if it didn’t close on certain days like private study cafés, I could study there more consistently during busy exam periods.

建議: Good clear response. You can improve by linking the two sentences with a reason word and making the career goal slightly more specific (e.g., type of AI research). Keep it concise and direct.

範例: After I graduate, I plan to attend graduate school in the UK to study data science because I want to research applications of artificial intelligence in healthcare, building on my nursing experience.

× I usually prefer starting at a Public Library near my home rather than the university library, but when the library is closed, I go to a nearby study cafe and get a day pass.

✓ I usually prefer starting at the public library near my home rather than the university library, but when it is closed, I go to a nearby study cafe and get a day pass.

Use of definite article and pronoun: 'Public Library' should be 'the public library' because it refers to a specific local library; also use 'it is closed' instead of 'the library is closed' is acceptable but 'it' avoids repetition. This sentence also fits present habitual tense, so keep present simple 'prefer' and 'go'. Suggestion: use 'the' for specific places and 'it' for reference to the same noun to make the sentence natural. Note: Only corrections that match the provided problem types are applied.

× I really like the Public Library because it has a separate laptop room which is perfect for my coding assignment.

✓ I really like the public library because it has a separate laptop room, which is perfect for my coding assignments.

Article and plural form: 'Public Library' should be 'the public library' or lowercase 'public library' when used generically; also 'coding assignment' is better pluralized to 'coding assignments' if referring to assignments in general. Added a comma before the nonrestrictive clause 'which is perfect...' to follow punctuation rules. This keeps present simple and clarifies meaning.

× Also, since it's a library, I can easily find and read any reference books I need to write away.

✓ Also, since it's a library, I can easily find and read any reference books I need to write with.

Incorrect preposition: 'write away' is not correct in this context. Use 'write with' to indicate the books help you when writing, or better 'to write from' if meaning using them as sources. Suggestion: choose a preposition that matches intended meaning; 'write with' or 'use for writing' are appropriate.

× Actually I'm fully satisfied with it right now, but if I had to pick one thing, I wish the Public Library doesn't have any days off just like private Study Cafe.

✓ Actually I'm fully satisfied with it right now, but if I had to pick one thing, I wish the public library didn't have any days off, like private study cafes.

Modal/conditional and article issues: When expressing a hypothetical wish about the present, use the past tense 'didn't have' after 'I wish' to indicate unreal present. Also use lowercase and plural 'study cafes' for general reference. Suggestion: use 'I wish + past tense' for present unreal situations and ensure consistent articles and plurality.

× However, I totally understand it since it's.

✓ However, I totally understand, since it has to follow certain rules.

Incomplete sentence: 'since it's.' is a sentence fragment lacking completion. Provide the reason or complete clause. Here 'it has to follow certain rules' completes the thought. Suggestion: always ensure 'since' introduces a full clause with a verb to avoid sentence fragments.

× After I graduate, I'm planning to go to a Graduate School in the UK for data science.

✓ After I graduate, I'm planning to go to a graduate school in the UK to study data science.

Capitalization and verb purpose: 'Graduate School' should be lowercase unless part of a proper name. Use 'to study data science' to clearly express purpose rather than 'for data science'. Tense 'I'm planning' with 'After I graduate' is correct for future intentions; keep present continuous for planned future actions.

× As I mentioned earlier, I used to work as a nurse, so I really want to focus on researching artificial intelligence in the medical field.

✓ As I mentioned earlier, I used to work as a nurse, so I really want to focus on researching artificial intelligence in the medical field.

No grammatical change needed: sentence correctly uses 'used to' for past habit and 'want to' for present desire. It matches the specified problem types, so no correction was applied.