学习— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Give a clear, concise direct answer first, then add 1–2 specific supporting details. Avoid unclear phrases and repetition. Correct small grammar issues (e.g., tense and word order) and remove irrelevant info like "from 5:00" which is unclear. Use linking words if you add details.

範例: I am a high school student preparing to take the SPM national exam this year. Currently I study in the science stream and I am focusing on revision and past papers to prepare for the test.

建議: Start with a direct statement of your school, then add one concise, specific detail (location, type, or a feature). Avoid repeating exam information already given. Use a linking word to connect details.

範例: I study at Kung Ching High School, a private secondary school in my city. It offers small class sizes and a strong science program, which suits my interests.

建議: Answer directly and give specific reasons with clear linking words. Avoid contradictions like "although... but"; use either "although" or "but" correctly. Provide concrete examples of what makes it good (teachers, resources, clubs).

範例: Yes, it is a good place to study because the teachers are supportive and class sizes are small. For example, the science teachers run extra sessions after school, which helped me improve in difficult topics.

建議: Respond with a clear suggestion and give one or two specific reasons or benefits. Avoid hesitations and vague fillers like "maybe" or "MMM." Use linking words to explain consequences.

範例: I would suggest the school build a proper sports field because currently we have to rent outside venues for events. This is costly and inconvenient; having a field would improve sports training and school events.

建議: Begin with a clear statement of your plan, then provide specific reasons and details (why pharmacy, why Monash, what steps you will take). Avoid repeated words like "maybe" and finish sentences fully. Use linking words to structure reasons.

範例: I plan to study pharmacy after high school because I enjoy chemistry and want to work in healthcare. I am considering Monash University because of its strong pharmacy ranking and research opportunities, so I am preparing to meet their entry requirements and improve my English for study abroad.

× I'm currently a student studying in a high school and I'm from 5:00 this year and I'm I will be taking the SPM test which is our country SPM test this year.

✓ I'm currently a high school student and I will be taking the SPM test this year.

Original sentence is long, redundant and has incorrect fragments like 'I'm from 5:00 this year' and repeated 'I'm'. Simplify to a clear subject and verbs: 'I'm currently a high school student' and 'I will be taking the SPM test this year.' This fixes sentence structure and removes meaningless parts. Suggestion: break complex ideas into short clauses and avoid repeating subjects.

× I study in Kung Ching High School, which is a private school. It's not a government school, but I will also take the SPM test this year.

✓ I study at Kung Ching High School, which is a private school. It's not a government school, and I will be taking the SPM test this year.

Use preposition 'at' with school (preposition issue) and use consistent tense/aspect 'will be taking' to match planned exam. Also replace 'but' with 'and' because the second clause is not contrasting. Suggestion: use 'study at' and keep parallel structure for related statements.

× Yeah, I absolutely agree that Quenching High School is a good place to study.

✓ Yes, I absolutely agree that Kung Ching High School is a good place to study.

The proper noun was misspelled ('Quenching' vs 'Kung Ching') — this is a word choice/name error rather than grammar, but correcting the school's name avoids confusion. Also 'Yeah' is informal; 'Yes' is better in test context.

× Although there are many competitors in the study environment, but I learn very much in the school.

✓ Although there is a lot of competition in the study environment, I learn a great deal at the school.

Don't use both 'Although' and 'but' together (conjunction error). 'Many competitors' is unnatural for students; use 'a lot of competition' and 'learn very much' -> 'learn a great deal'. Use preposition 'at' with school. Suggestion: choose one subordinate conjunction and make the main clause follow it.

× I can learn how to socialise, how to solve difficult problem in the school, which is very helpful in my life.

✓ I can learn how to socialise and how to solve difficult problems at school, which is very helpful in my life.

Use plural 'problems' (quantifier/number) and remove unnecessary 'the' before 'school' when speaking generally. Also use 'and' to join two infinitive phrases. Suggestion: pluralize countable nouns and keep parallel structure.

× Maybe I will suggest the school to add a field in our school because our school doesn't have a field and like when there are some events we should always need to hire the field like outside our school.

✓ Maybe I will suggest that the school add a sports field because our school doesn't have one, so we always need to hire an outside field for events.

Original sentence is repetitive and awkward. Use 'suggest that the school add' (correct verb pattern), replace repeated 'our school' with pronouns, use 'one' for a previously mentioned countable noun, and simplify 'we always need to hire an outside field.' Suggestion: avoid repetition and use concise noun references.

× That's quite MMM.

✓ That's quite inconvenient.

'MMM' is unclear filler and not acceptable in formal answers. Replace with a clear adjective like 'inconvenient' that describes the situation. Suggestion: avoid fillers and choose specific descriptive words.

× I'm currently a science stream student so I'm interested in pharmacy right now and I research that Monash University has a higher ranking in the pharmacy course.

✓ I'm currently a science-stream student, so I'm interested in pharmacy, and I found that Monash University has a high ranking for its pharmacy program.

Use past simple 'found' or present perfect for research already done; 'I research' is incorrect in this context. Use 'science-stream' or 'science stream' as a compound noun, and 'pharmacy program' is more natural. Suggestion: use correct tense for completed research ('I found' or 'I've found').

× So maybe I will take the pharmacy course in Monash University so maybe I will study abroad in.

✓ So maybe I will take the pharmacy course at Monash University and study abroad there.

Use preposition 'at' with university (preposition issue), avoid repeating 'maybe' and incomplete ending 'in.' Combine into a single clear sentence and include 'there' to indicate abroad. Suggestion: use 'at Monash University' and avoid unnecessary repetition.