机会— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Answer directly in the past tense: “Yes, I had the opportunity…” Replace unclear phrases such as “participate in some place in the workshop” with “take part in a school theatre workshop.” Explain one specific benefit, such as becoming more confident or meeting classmates, and use linking words like “although” and “also.” Avoid repetition and incomplete phrases such as “To know to new new people.”

範例: Yes, I had the opportunity to take part in a school theatre workshop when I was a child. Although it was challenging at first, it helped me become more confident and express my ideas in front of others. I also met several new classmates through the workshop.

建議: State your opinion clearly at the beginning and develop it with a logical contrast. The answer contains unfinished phrases and disconnected examples, so combine them into complete sentences. Use “however” or “on the other hand” to explain that people should try new activities, but they should not feel forced to continue something they dislike. Give two or three well-connected examples, such as sports, art, or dance.

範例: I think people should try a variety of activities, especially when they are young, because this helps them discover their interests and develop new skills. However, they should not feel pressured to continue an activity if they are uncomfortable or unhappy. For example, someone might try tennis, painting, or dance and then choose the activity they enjoy most.

× Yes, when I was a child, I have the opportunity to participate in some place in the workshop.

✓ Yes, when I was a child, I had the opportunity to participate in a workshop at school.

The question asks about childhood, so the past tense is required. Use had instead of have. Also, participate is normally followed by in, and a workshop at school is a clearer and more natural phrase than some place in the workshop.

× Yes, when I was a child, I have the opportunity to participate in some place in the workshop.

✓ Yes, when I was a child, I had the opportunity to participate in a workshop at school.

Workshop is a singular countable noun, so it needs the indefinite article a when it is mentioned for the first time. Use a workshop rather than the workshop unless a specific workshop has already been mentioned.

× The theater workshop of the school was very good for my personality to was challenging also, but very good to.

✓ The school theater workshop was very good for my personal development. It was also challenging, but it was very beneficial.

The original sentence contains an incorrect structure: for my personality to was challenging. Use two complete sentences with clear subjects and verbs. The phrase school theater workshop is also more natural than theater workshop of the school.

× To know to new new people.

✓ I got to know new people.

The original phrase is not a complete sentence because it does not have a main verb with a subject. Use I got to know to express the idea of meeting or becoming acquainted with people. Do not repeat new, and do not use to before new people.

× I think some people find something they like a lot, umm they can improve in certain skills, but if someone doesn't feel comfortable, of course he or she should try new things, for example sports.

✓ I think that if people find something they like, they can improve certain skills. However, if they do not feel comfortable, they should try new things, such as sports, art, or dance.

The original sentence joins several independent clauses with commas, which makes the structure unclear. Use if to show the condition and separate the ideas into two sentences. Using they for a general person also avoids an unnecessarily repetitive he or she.

× I think some people find something they like a lot, umm they can improve in certain skills, but if someone doesn't feel comfortable, of course he or she should try new things, for example sports.

✓ I think that if people find something they like, they can improve certain skills. However, if they do not feel comfortable, they should try new things, such as sports, art, or dance.

The verb improve is usually used directly with the skill being developed. Say improve certain skills, not improve in certain skills. You can use improve in a subject when referring to performance in an area, but it is not needed here.

× Arts Dance. And.

✓ For example, they could try sports, art, or dance.

Arts Dance and And are fragments and do not form a complete sentence. Combine the examples into a sentence with a subject and a verb, such as they could try.