机会— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Tu respuesta es relevante y expresa una opinión clara, pero contiene un error de estructura: “I did my parents enrolled me” debe separarse o reformularse como “Yes, I did. My parents enrolled me...”. También sería más natural decir “I really enjoyed the classes” en lugar de “I really loved them”, porque “them” puede resultar ambiguo. Además, “relaxing” no es la descripción más precisa para unas clases de natación; puedes explicar qué te gustaba de ellas, por ejemplo, aprender nuevas habilidades o pasar tiempo con otros niños.

範例: Yes, I did. When I was a child, my parents enrolled me in swimming classes, and I really enjoyed them. I liked learning new techniques and spending time in the pool with other children. It was both fun and a good way to stay active.

建議: Tu respuesta comunica la idea general, pero tiene muchas repeticiones, errores gramaticales y una estructura poco clara. Evita repetir “all the things” y usa una oración temática directa, por ejemplo, “Yes, I think people should try a variety of activities.” La expresión “a different source of ability” no es natural; puedes decir “different skills” o “different abilities”. También corrige la comparación: “the more things you try, the more your skills develop”. Finalmente, añade una razón o un ejemplo específico para hacer la respuesta más completa y coherente.

範例: Yes, I think people should try a variety of activities because each one can help them develop different skills. For example, playing a sport can improve teamwork, while learning a musical instrument can increase patience and concentration. However, people should choose activities they genuinely enjoy rather than trying to do everything.

× Fortunately, yes, I did my parents enrolled me in swimming classes when I was a kid and I really loved them.

✓ Fortunately, yes, I did. My parents enrolled me in swimming classes when I was a kid, and I really loved them.

The original sentence incorrectly joins two independent clauses with a comma: 'Fortunately, yes, I did' and 'my parents enrolled me...' Use a period to separate them. The comma before 'and' is appropriate because it joins two complete clauses.

× I think there's no limit towards all the things of all the things you can try.

✓ I think there's no limit to all the things you can try.

The correct preposition after 'limit' in this expression is 'to,' not 'towards.' The phrase 'of all the things' is also unnecessary and makes the sentence unclear. Use 'a limit to the things you can try.'

× I think there's no limit towards all the things of all the things you can try everything is different and everything requires a different source of ability.

✓ I think there's no limit to the things you can try. Everything is different, and everything requires a different ability.

The original contains several clauses joined without proper punctuation, creating a run-on sentence. Separate the main ideas with a period and use a comma before 'and' when it connects two complete clauses. Also, avoid repeating 'all the things.'

× So I believe that most the more things you try, the most glow your abilities are.

✓ So I believe that the more things you try, the more your abilities grow.

The correlative comparative structure is 'the more..., the more...,' not 'most the more..., the most....' Also, 'grow' is the correct verb because abilities grow; 'glow' means to give off light. The natural word order is 'the more your abilities grow.'