机会— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 你的回答切题，也提供了具体活动和个人感受，但有几处明显的词汇和语法问题。首先，“community survivors”应改为“community service”；其次，讲述过去经历时要保持过去时，例如将“help”改为“helped”，将“feel”改为“felt”。另外，句子过长，多个信息之间缺少清晰的连接，建议拆成2—3句，并使用“where”“because”或“as a result”等连接词。

範例: Yes, I did. When I was a child, I often took part in community service with my classmates. Our teacher took us to the local square, where we helped pick up litter and clean the surrounding area. I felt proud because we were making our neighborhood a better place.

建議: 你的观点明确，但表达不够流畅，存在“we can we can”的重复，以及“and to solve the questions we need to answer”这种不自然的搭配。可以使用“try different activities”或“explore new things”，并将理由表达为“meet new people and learn how to solve problems”。建议先给出直接观点，再用“because”连接两个具体理由，控制在2—3句内。

範例: Yes, I think people should try a variety of activities. By doing so, they can meet new people and discover their interests. They can also learn how to deal with different challenges and become more adaptable.

× When I was a child I often took part in community survivors with my classmates, our teacher would take us to the local square where we help pick up litter and clean their area, and I feel proud to help improve the neighborhood.

✓ When I was a child, I often took part in community survivors with my classmates. Our teacher would take us to the local square, where we helped pick up litter and clean the area, and I felt proud to help improve the neighborhood.

句子描述的是童年时发生的经历，因此相关动作应使用过去时。将 help 改为 helped，将 feel 改为 felt。原句还包含多个完整意思，使用句号和逗号分开后，句子结构更清楚。注意：community survivors 的表达可能存在词汇问题，但它不属于指定的语法问题类型，因此不做修改。

× I think so if we try some different things we can we can meet lots of people and to solve the questions we need to answer.

✓ I think so. If we try some different things, we can meet lots of people and solve the questions we need to answer.

情态动词 can 后面必须接动词原形，不能使用 to + 动词。因此，to solve 应改为 solve。另外，原句中 can 重复了一次，应删除一个。

× I think so if we try some different things we can we can meet lots of people and to solve the questions we need to answer.

✓ I think so. If we try some different things, we can meet lots of people and solve the questions we need to answer.

原句连接了多个完整意思，却没有正确使用标点；同时 can 重复，meet 和 solve 也没有保持平行结构。可以在 I think so 后使用句号，并在 If 条件从句后加逗号；在 can 后并列使用 meet 和 solve。