机会— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Câu trả lời đi thẳng vào câu hỏi và có lý do rõ ràng, nhưng có một số lỗi ngữ pháp và dùng từ: “many opportunity” cần sửa thành “many opportunities”, “in the mountainous area” nên dùng “in a mountainous area”, và “There are” cần đổi thành “There were” vì bạn đang nói về quá khứ. Ngoài ra, “cloth”, “sport theme” và “commiter classes” chưa đúng ngữ cảnh; có thể dùng “clubs”, “sports teams” và “community classes”. Bạn nên thêm một ví dụ cụ thể về hoạt động mình không thể tham gia để câu trả lời tự nhiên và đầy đủ hơn.

範例: No, I didn't have many opportunities to try new activities as a child because I grew up in a mountainous area. There were very few clubs and sports facilities nearby, so I couldn't join sports teams or community classes. For example, I would have liked to learn swimming, but there were no swimming pools in my hometown.

建議: Bạn đã nêu rõ quan điểm, nhưng câu trả lời bị ngắt giữa chừng và chưa hoàn thành ý. Cụm “try to think some” không tự nhiên; nên dùng “try something”, còn “different with the ability” nên đổi thành “outside their comfort zone” hoặc “different from what they are used to”. Bạn cũng lặp lại “try” nhiều lần và chưa đưa ra kết quả hoặc ví dụ cụ thể. Hãy dùng cấu trúc: quan điểm → lý do → ví dụ/kết quả, đồng thời kết thúc câu rõ ràng.

範例: Yes, I think people should try a variety of activities because this helps them discover their interests and develop new skills. It can also make them more confident when they step outside their comfort zone. For example, someone who tries public speaking may become better at communicating with others.

× I didn't have many opportunity to take part in new activities when I was a child because I grew up in the mountainous area.

✓ I didn't have many opportunities to take part in new activities when I was a child because I grew up in a mountainous area.

The quantifier many must be followed by a plural countable noun. Therefore, opportunity should be opportunities. The article a is more natural when mentioning a mountainous area in general.

× There are few cloth and modern facilities nearby so I couldn't join things like sport theme or commiter classes.

✓ There were few clothing stores and modern facilities nearby, so I couldn't join activities such as sports or computer classes.

The speaker is describing the situation during childhood, so the past-tense form were is needed instead of are. The correction also uses natural plural nouns and activity expressions to make the sentence grammatically complete and clear.

× From my perspective, I think each individual should try as many different things as they can because when they try to think some that is very different with the ability they can try to try their best to do it and

✓ From my perspective, I think each individual should try as many different things as they can because, when they try something that is very different from their abilities, they can do their best to accomplish it.

Some is normally used before a noun, but an indefinite pronoun is needed here. Use something when referring to an unspecified activity or experience. The relative clause should therefore be something that is very different from their abilities.

× From my perspective, I think each individual should try as many different things as they can because when they try to think some that is very different with the ability they can try to try their best to do it and

✓ From my perspective, I think each individual should try as many different things as they can because, when they try something that is very different from their abilities, they can do their best to accomplish it.

The adjective different is followed by the preposition from, not with. The correct pattern is different from something or someone.

× From my perspective, I think each individual should try as many different things as they can because when they try to think some that is very different with the ability they can try to try their best to do it and

✓ From my perspective, I think each individual should try as many different things as they can because, when they try something that is very different from their abilities, they can do their best to accomplish it.

The original sentence ends with and, so it is incomplete. It also contains an unnecessarily repeated verb phrase, try to try. Use do their best to accomplish it to form a complete and natural sentence.