机会— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer is well organized and directly answers the question with specific examples and details. However, “I took piano” would sound more natural as “I took piano lessons,” and “I did them” is unclear because activities are usually described with verbs such as “attended” or “practised.” You could also reduce repetition by combining the final ideas more smoothly.

範例: Yes, I had plenty of opportunities to try new activities as a child. My parents signed me up for piano lessons, and I also joined a school swimming club. I took piano lessons for two years and went swimming once or twice a week because I enjoyed learning new skills.

建議: You give a clear opinion and a reason, but the answer is slightly repetitive because “try as many things” and “try lots of things” express the same idea. Also, focusing only on children makes the answer less directly relevant to “people” in general. Add a specific example or result, such as discovering a talent, building confidence, or finding a suitable career, and use a linking word to make the explanation more developed.

範例: Yes, I think people should try a variety of activities, especially when they are young. By doing so, they can discover their interests and develop useful skills. For example, someone who tries different sports, musical instruments, and hobbies may eventually find a talent they would never have known about otherwise.

× For example, I took piano for two years and I also joined a school swimming club and I did them once or twice a week because I liked learning new skills.

✓ For example, I took piano lessons for two years, and I also went swimming once or twice a week because I liked learning new skills.

The pronoun 'them' is incorrect because it does not clearly refer to the activities mentioned. 'Piano lessons' and 'a swimming club' are not both things that can be directly replaced by 'them' in this sentence. Use a clear verb such as 'went swimming' or repeat the activity to make the meaning precise.