机会— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Answer the question directly and use the past tense consistently. Avoid repeating words such as “exercise” and “uh,” and do not describe drawing as an exercise; call it an activity or hobby instead. Organize your response with a clear reason and a specific example, such as explaining how drawing helped you become more confident. Also, say “I was quite shy” rather than “I’m a quite shy.”

範例: Yes, I did. Although I was quite shy as a child, I tried drawing for the first time at school. I enjoyed it because it allowed me to express my ideas without having to speak in front of other people. Later, I became more confident and joined a few other activities.

建議: Give a clear opinion in the first sentence and then support it with one or two logical reasons. Avoid incomplete and unclear phrases such as “what they like,” “some people can,” and “explore their mindset.” Use accurate grammar, including “try new things” rather than “try a new things,” and replace fillers with linking words such as “because,” “for example,” and “as a result.”

範例: Yes, I think people should try a variety of activities, although they do not have to try everything. New experiences can help them discover their interests and develop useful skills. For example, someone who takes a cooking class might discover a talent that could become a career or a relaxing hobby.

× When I was a child, I'm a quite shy.

✓ When I was a child, I was quite shy.

The time expression when I was a child refers to the past, so the verb must be in the past tense. Use was, not am. Also, do not use a before the adjective phrase quite shy.

× I try some kind of exercise like drawing.

✓ I tried some kind of exercise like drawing.

The student is describing an experience in childhood, so the verb should be in the past tense. The past form of try is tried.

× They can try different things, what they like.

✓ They can try different things that they like.

After the noun things, use the relative pronoun that, not what. That introduces a relative clause describing the things.

× Some people won't try a new things to explore their mindset.

✓ Some people won't try new things to explore their mindset.

Things is plural, so it cannot be used with the singular article a. Remove a and use the plural phrase new things.

× Some people can, some people won't try a new things to explore their mindset.

✓ Some people can try different things, but some people won't try new things to explore their mindset.

Two independent clauses need a conjunction to show the contrast between them. Use but to connect the ideas clearly.

× I'd like you that, yeah.

✓ I think people should try different things.

The original sentence does not form a clear grammatical structure. To express an opinion about the question, use a complete structure such as I think people should try different things.