机会— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Câu trả lời chưa trả lời trực tiếp câu hỏi và có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp, lặp từ và diễn đạt không rõ nghĩa. Em nên bắt đầu bằng “Yes, I did” hoặc “No, I didn’t”, sau đó nêu một hoạt động cụ thể và giải thích ngắn gọn lợi ích của hoạt động đó. Tránh lặp các từ như “improve/improvement” và cần dùng cấu trúc rõ ràng, chẳng hạn “It helped me improve…”.

範例: Yes, I did. When I was a child, I took part in a school drama club. It helped me become more confident and improve my communication skills.

建議: Em đã cố gắng đưa ra lý do, nhưng câu trả lời bị mâu thuẫn giữa “Yes” và “shouldn’t”, đồng thời có lỗi dùng đại từ và nhiều từ thừa. Em nên nêu quan điểm rõ ràng ngay từ đầu, dùng “people/their” thay vì “my”, rồi phát triển một lý do cụ thể bằng từ nối như “because” hoặc “For example”.

範例: Yes, I think people should try different activities because they can discover their interests and develop new skills. For example, trying a sport or learning a musical instrument can make them more confident.

× I think of it as plays in because it has or it helps a lot a improve improvement.

✓ I think I did because it helped me improve a lot.

The question asks about opportunities during childhood, so the reason should generally be expressed in the past tense. Use helped instead of helps to refer to a past experience. After helped, use the base form improve, not the noun improvement.

× I think of it as plays in because it has or it helps a lot a improve improvement.

✓ I think I did because it helped me improve a lot.

The original sentence contains several incomplete and conflicting phrases, such as plays in, it has, and a improve improvement. A clear sentence structure is subject + verb + because-clause. The phrase helped me improve is a correct and natural structure.

× Yes they shouldn't try many different things because Also they can improve my improve skills or eight

✓ Yes, they should try many different things because they can improve their skills.

The answer begins with Yes, so should is needed to express agreement with the idea that people ought to try different things. Shouldn't expresses the opposite meaning and conflicts with Yes.

× Yes they shouldn't try many different things because Also they can improve my improve skills or eight

✓ Yes, they should try many different things because they can improve their skills.

The subject is people or they, so the possessive pronoun must be their, not my. Their skills means the skills belonging to the people who try different things.

× Yes they shouldn't try many different things because Also they can improve my improve skills or eight

✓ Yes, they should try many different things because they can improve their skills.

Because already introduces the reason, so Also should not be inserted immediately after it. Remove Also or place also in a suitable position, such as They can also improve their skills.

× Yes they shouldn't try many different things because Also they can improve my improve skills or eight

✓ Yes, they should try many different things because they can improve their skills.

The original sentence contains a confusing conjunction sequence and an incomplete ending, or eight. A complete answer should contain a clear main clause followed by a complete reason clause.