机会— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 「No, I didn't.」の後に、過去形を正しく使って理由と具体例を加えましょう。「I not / I'm not joined」は誤りなので、「I didn't join」または「I wasn't able to join」を使います。また、「crosses」は文脈に合わないため、「clubs」や「after-school activities」などに置き換え、「because my parents were busy」のように主語と動詞を明確にしてください。

範例: No, I didn’t have many opportunities to try new activities as a child. My parents were usually busy, so I couldn’t join after-school clubs. For example, I wanted to take swimming lessons, but I didn’t have enough time to attend them.

建議: 最初の「I think people should try」の繰り返しを避け、まず明確な意見を述べてから理由と結果を続けましょう。「to try a new activity makes people a new」は不自然なので、「trying new activities helps people become more open-minded」や「develop new skills」のように表現できます。さらに、具体的な例を1つ加えると、回答がより効果的になります。

範例: Yes, I think people should try a variety of activities because it helps them discover their interests and develop new skills. In addition, new experiences can make people more open-minded and confident. For example, someone who joins a drama club may become better at communicating with others.

× When I was a child I not I'm not joined any crosses or because my parents busy.

✓ When I was a child, I didn't join any courses because my parents were busy.

The question asks about a past experience, so the past-tense auxiliary did not is needed. After did not, use the base form join, not joined. The phrase I'm not joined is also incorrect because it uses the present tense and passive form.

× When I was a child I not I'm not joined any crosses or because my parents busy.

✓ When I was a child, I didn't join any courses because my parents were busy.

The clause because my parents busy is missing the linking verb were. Because the situation happened in the past, use were before the adjective busy. Also, courses is the likely intended word if the student means organized learning activities.

× I think people should try people should try many activities because to try a new activity makes people a new

✓ I think people should try many activities because trying new activities gives them new experiences.

The phrase people should try is unnecessarily repeated, and the ending makes people a new is incomplete because a new requires a following noun. Use the gerund phrase trying new activities as the subject and complete the meaning with gives them new experiences.