机会— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Answer directly and give one or two specific examples. Use the correct term “Model United Nations” rather than “modern United Nations,” and say “through my school” instead of “through the help of my school.” Avoid beginning a new sentence with “And”; connect the ideas with “which” or “as a result.”

範例: Yes, I did. My school gave me the opportunity to join Model United Nations and several other extracurricular activities. I really enjoyed them because they helped me develop my communication skills and meet students from different backgrounds.

建議: State your opinion clearly, then support it with two well-organized reasons. Avoid repeating “gain new experiences” and reduce the long chain of ideas. Use the natural expression “step outside their comfort zone” and add a specific example or result to make the answer more effective.

範例: Yes, I think people should try a variety of activities because this helps them discover their interests and develop useful skills. It also encourages them to step outside their comfort zone and meet new people. For example, joining a sports club or taking a course can make someone more confident and independent.

× I used to take part in modern United Nations and many other extracurriculars through the help of my school.

✓ I used to take part in Model United Nations and many other extracurricular activities with the help of my school.

The phrase through the help of is not the appropriate prepositional expression here. Use with the help of to mean that the school provided assistance or support. Also, Model United Nations is the standard name of the activity, and extracurricular activities is clearer than the informal noun extracurriculars.