机会— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 回答方向正确，也提供了排球和绘画两个例子，但句子没有完整结束，且存在明显语法和词汇问题。应直接说明自己参加过哪些活动；将“part of new teams”改为“take part in new teams or activities”，“playing played volleyballs”改为“playing volleyball”，并保持时态一致，例如使用“joined”“learned”。可以用“for example”连接具体细节，答案控制在2—3个完整句子内。

範例: Yes, I had several opportunities to try new activities as a child. For example, I joined my school volleyball team in high school and learned how to draw. These activities helped me make new friends and develop my interests.

建議: 观点明确，但表达重复且句子结构混乱，导致意思不清楚。“they don't know they don't know”应删除；“lairdring things”不是正确表达，可以改为“learn new skills”，而“good at”后面需要接具体活动或名词。建议采用“观点 + 原因 + 结果”的结构，并使用“because”“as a result”等连接词，使逻辑更清晰。

範例: Yes, I think people should try a variety of activities. By doing so, they can discover their strengths and learn new skills. For example, someone who tries painting may realize that they are naturally creative.

× Yes, I had a lot of opportunities to learn new things and part of new teams like playing played volleyballs when I was a high school student or learned how to draw when I was

✓ Yes, I had a lot of opportunities to learn new things and be part of new teams, such as playing volleyball when I was a high school student or learning how to draw.

“part of”前面缺少动词“be”，因为“learn”和“be”需要保持平行结构。“like”后面的例子也需要完整、平行的结构。原句最后的“when I was”没有完成，后面缺少补充信息，因此需要删除或补完整。

× like playing played volleyballs ... or learned how to draw

✓ such as playing volleyball ... or learning how to draw

“such as/like”后面是在列举活动，所以两个动词应使用平行的形式： “playing”和“learning”。不能使用过去式“learned”。使用“-ing”形式可以表示这些活动。

× playing played volleyballs

✓ playing volleyball

“volleyball”表示这项球类运动时通常是不可数名词，不需要加复数词尾“-s”。因此应说“playing volleyball”，而不是“playing volleyballs”。

× Yes, I think so if people don't try new things they don't know they don't know what they can do and what they can discover which can be lairdring things or good at

✓ Yes, I think so. If people don't try new things, they won't know what they can do or what they can discover, such as things they can learn or skills they can be good at.

原句包含多个从句，但缺少清晰的连接和完整的句子结构。“Yes, I think so”后应使用句号；条件从句“If people don't try new things”后需要逗号。“which can be lairdring things or good at”结构不完整，改为“such as things they can learn or skills they can be good at”，使列举内容完整、意思清楚。说较长的句子时，建议把复杂内容分成两个句子，并确保每个从句都有清楚的主语和动词。