机会— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 回答方向基本相关，也尝试提供了钢琴和唱歌的例子，但句子没有完整结束，影响表达的清晰度和自然度。首先要直接说明小时候参加过什么新活动；其次，用过去时统一叙述，例如将“have”改为“had”，“want”改为“wanted”，“like”改为“liked”。“shopper shopping mall”表达不自然，可以改为“a shopping mall”；同时避免把两个例子塞进一个过长的句子中。建议使用“for example”和“also”连接细节，并说明活动带来的结果，例如学会了什么或是否坚持下来。

範例: Yes, I had several opportunities to try new activities as a child. For example, I became interested in playing the piano after seeing one in a shopping mall, so I asked my mother if I could take lessons. I also enjoyed singing along to my favorite songs. These activities helped me discover my interest in music.

建議: 回答有明确观点，也提到了“获得不同经历”和“发现兴趣”两个理由，但语法和搭配问题较多，影响准确性。例如，“as many different things as they can”应改为“as many different things as possible”；“because have”应改为“because they can gain”；“a wonderful time for their life”以及“have their better future”都不自然。建议采用清晰的结构：先给出观点，再用“because”说明理由，最后补充一个具体例子或结果。不要重复使用“many different”，并把“while they're playing it”改成更准确的“when they try new activities”。

範例: Yes, I think people should try as many different things as possible. This allows them to gain new experiences and discover what they are genuinely interested in. For instance, someone might try photography and realize that they would like to pursue it as a career. Trying new activities can also help people become more confident and adaptable.

× Yes, I have plenty of opportunities to take part in new activities.

✓ Yes, I had plenty of opportunities to take part in new activities.

问题描述的是童年经历，应该使用过去时。将现在时“have”改为过去时“had”。

× For example, when I saw a very beautiful piano in a shopper shopping mall, I told my mom that I want to play the piano and also when I saw lots of people singing their favorite songs while they're working I also like to learn how to

✓ For example, when I saw a very beautiful piano in a shopping mall, I told my mom that I wanted to play the piano. Also, when I saw lots of people singing their favorite songs while they were working, I wanted to learn how to sing.

“shopper”是名词，不能直接修饰“shopping mall”；表示“购物中心”应使用固定表达“shopping mall”。

× For example, when I saw a very beautiful piano in a shopper shopping mall, I told my mom that I want to play the piano and also when I saw lots of people singing their favorite songs while they're working I also like to learn how to

✓ For example, when I saw a very beautiful piano in a shopping mall, I told my mom that I wanted to play the piano. Also, when I saw lots of people singing their favorite songs while they were working, I wanted to learn how to sing.

这段内容是在讲过去的童年经历，因此“want”“are”“like”应分别改为过去时“wanted”“were”“wanted”。

× I told my mom that I want to play the piano.

✓ I told my mom that I wanted to play the piano.

“I told my mom that...”是间接引语。主句使用过去时“told”时，从句中的“want”通常要后移为过去时“wanted”。

× I also like to learn how to

✓ I also wanted to learn how to sing.

“how to”后面缺少动词，句子没有完整表达意思。应在“how to”后补充动词，例如“sing”。

× Yes, I think many people should try many different things as they can because have many different experiences.

✓ Yes, I think many people should try as many different things as they can because they can have many different experiences.

“尽可能多的事物”应使用固定结构“as many + 可数名词复数 + as”。因此应将“try many different things as they can”改为“try as many different things as they can”。

× Yes, I think many people should try many different things as they can because have many different experiences.

✓ Yes, I think many people should try as many different things as they can because they can have many different experiences.

“because have...”缺少主语，句子结构不完整。应补充主语“they”，形成“because they can have...”。

× It's a wonderful time for their life.

✓ It's a wonderful time in their lives.

表示“在人生中”通常使用介词“in”，而不是“for”。另外，主语“their”表示多个人，所以“life”应使用复数“lives”。

× While they're playing it, they will find they are truly interested to have their better future.

✓ While they are trying different activities, they will find that they are truly interested in having a better future.

“it”不能清楚地指代前面的复数名词“different things”，因此应改为“different activities”，或使用复数代词“them”。这里用“trying different activities”表达更准确。

× They are truly interested to have their better future.

✓ They are truly interested in having a better future.

固定搭配是“be interested in doing something”，介词“in”后面要接动名词。因此“to have”应改为“having”。

× They are truly interested to have their better future.

✓ They are truly interested in having a better future.

“interested”后面通常搭配介词“in”，不能使用“to”。正确结构是“be interested in doing something”。

× They are truly interested to have their better future.

✓ They are truly interested in having a better future.

“future”在这里表示一个更好的未来，是可数概念，前面需要使用不定冠词“a”。因此应说“a better future”，而不是“their better future”。