机会— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 回答有回应问题，但语法和表达不够自然。应使用过去时，例如把“have”改为“had”，把“when I'm in childhood”改为“when I was a child”，并明确说明自己参加了什么活动，而不是只说看到同学唱歌和看到钢琴。可以先给出主题句，再用“for example”补充具体经历。注意“take part in”后面要接活动，如“singing”或“piano lessons”；“a very beautiful piano here”也不符合语境，可以改为“a beautiful piano in the classroom”。

範例: Yes, I had several opportunities to try new activities when I was a child. For example, in kindergarten, I joined a singing club after seeing some of my classmates perform. I also started taking piano lessons because there was a beautiful piano in our classroom. I really enjoyed both activities, although I eventually focused more on singing.

建議: 观点明确，但句子过长，语法错误较多，影响自然度和清晰度。应将“because have plenty of things that they are good at”改为“because trying different things can help people discover their strengths”；“future planet”明显用词错误，可能想表达“future plans”或“future careers”；“find your very interested”应改为“find what you are really interested in”。建议使用“First of all”或“Also”连接理由，并加入一个具体例子或结果，使答案更有说服力。

範例: Yes, I think people should try a variety of activities whenever possible. First of all, this helps them discover their interests and strengths. For example, someone might try photography as a hobby and later realize that they want to study it professionally. It can also make life more enjoyable and help people make better decisions about their future.

× Yes, I think I have plenty of opportunities to take part in when I'm in childhood for example So when I'm in kindergarten, I saw many classmates like to sing a song and also I saw a very beautiful piano here.

✓ Yes, I think I had plenty of opportunities to take part in new activities when I was a child. For example, when I was in kindergarten, I saw many classmates who liked singing, and I also saw a very beautiful piano there.

题目询问的是童年时期的经历，因此应该使用一般过去时：have 改为 had，am 改为 was，see 改为 saw。短语“take part in”后面需要接具体活动，所以补充了“new activities”。“when I'm in childhood”表达不自然，应该说“when I was a child”。在“saw many classmates”之后，用“who liked singing”构成完整的定语从句；like 后面表示一般活动时可以使用动名词 singing。由于叙述的是过去地点，“here”应改为“there”。

× Yes, I totally think that people should try many different things that they can because have plenty of things that they are good at is a wonderful thing and is good for their future planet and I think maybe have lots of things to try so you can find your very interested and have a better future.

✓ Yes, I totally think that people should try as many different things as they can because having plenty of things that they are good at is a wonderful thing and is good for their future. I think that trying lots of things can help them find what they are really interested in and have a better future.

“because have...”和“maybe have...”缺少主语，因此改为“because having...”和“trying lots of things...”，使句子结构完整。“having plenty of things...”是动名词短语作主语，所以谓语使用单数形式“is”。“find your very interested”中，interested 是形容人的感受，不能直接作“find”的宾语；应该说“find what they are really interested in”，表示“找到自己真正感兴趣的事物”。前文主语是 people，后面应保持第三人称复数，用“them”和“they”，不能突然改成“you”。“future planet”不是合适的表达；这里根据语境改为“future”，表示“未来”。