机会— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 回答回应了问题，也提到了烹饪活动，但语法和搭配错误较多，影响了自然度和准确性。应使用“be passionate about becoming a cook”而不是“passionate with becoming a cooker”；“cook”指厨师或做饭的人，“cooker”通常指炊具。注意时态：谈论童年经历时应使用过去时，如“took part”和“wanted”。此外，答案中“cooking”重复较多，可以用具体活动和结果来丰富内容，并使用“because”和“as a result”等连接词。建议控制在3—4句话，先直接回答，再补充活动细节、原因和收获。

範例: Yes. When I was a child, I had the opportunity to join a weekend cooking class because I was interested in becoming a chef. We learned how to prepare simple dishes such as fried rice and cookies. As a result, I became more confident in the kitchen and developed a stronger interest in cooking.

建議: 回答表达了“应该尝试新事物”的观点，但句子结构不完整，且“some people”与问题中的“people”不一致。应使用清晰的句型：“I think people should try different things because...” 另外，“it not only can”应改为“it can not only...but also...”；“build a good relationship to reaching my sociality”搭配不自然，应改为“build relationships and expand their social circle”。建议加入一个具体例子，例如参加运动或志愿活动，并说明这些活动如何提升技能、认识朋友或增强自信。

範例: Yes, I think people should try a variety of activities whenever possible. This can not only help them develop new skills but also allow them to meet people with similar interests. For example, joining a sports club can improve someone’s fitness and help them make new friends. However, they should choose activities that genuinely interest them rather than trying everything without a clear purpose.

× Yes, when I was a child I was passionate with becoming a cooker.

✓ Yes, when I was a child, I was passionate about becoming a cook.

表示“对……充满热情”时，应该使用固定搭配“be passionate about”，不能使用“passionate with”。另外，“cook”表示厨师，是更自然的职业名词。

× So I will take part in some activities which is about cooking.

✓ So I took part in some activities which were about cooking.

整段是在描述童年经历，因此应该使用一般过去时。“will take part”是将来时，应改为“took part”。同时，先行词“activities”是复数，所以后面的“is”要改为“were”。

× So I will take part in some activities which is about cooking.

✓ So I took part in some activities which were about cooking.

关系代词“which”指代复数名词“activities”，所以谓语动词应该使用复数形式“were”，不能使用单数形式“is”。

× I want to improve my skills over cooking so I will take part in it.

✓ I wanted to improve my skills in cooking, so I took part in them.

表示“在烹饪方面的技能”时，应该使用“skills in cooking”，而不是“skills over cooking”。此外，童年经历需要使用过去时“wanted”和“took”。

× I want to improve my skills over cooking so I will take part in it.

✓ I wanted to improve my skills in cooking, so I took part in them.

“it”是单数代词，但它指代前面的复数名词“some activities”，所以应该使用复数代词“them”。

× Yes, I think some people should try something new it not only can improve our skills but also can help us to build a good relationship to reaching my sociality.

✓ Yes, I think people should try new things because they can not only improve their skills but also help them build good relationships.

原句把两个完整的意思直接连接在一起，缺少连接词，导致句子结构不完整。可以使用“because”连接原因。主语是“people”，所以后面应使用“their”和“them”，并且“new things”与“they”保持复数一致。

× Yes, I think some people should try something new it not only can improve our skills but also can help us to build a good relationship to reaching my sociality.

✓ Yes, I think people should try new things because they can not only improve their skills but also help them build good relationships.

“not only”通常放在情态动词或助动词之后、主要动词之前，正确结构是“can not only improve ... but also help ...”。不能使用“not only can improve”这种不完整的排列。

× Yes, I think some people should try something new it not only can improve our skills but also can help us to build a good relationship to reaching my sociality.

✓ Yes, I think people should try new things because they can not only improve their skills but also help them build good relationships.

“relationship to reaching my sociality”中的介词和表达结构都不自然。这里可以直接说“build good relationships”，表示“建立良好的人际关系”。