机会— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Answer more naturally and directly. Use the past tense consistently: say “When I was in kindergarten” and “I tried new things every day.” Avoid unnecessary repetition such as “every, every” and “a new things.” Also, use specific and accurate expressions such as “drawing pictures” and “running in the park” instead of “running out the park.” Finish with one clear explanation of why these activities were new or interesting to you.

範例: Yes, I did. When I was in kindergarten, I tried different activities almost every day, such as drawing pictures and running in the park. Since many places and activities were new to me, I was always excited to explore them.

建議: Give a clear opinion in the first sentence and then explain both sides in a logical order. Correct the grammar by saying “It depends on the person,” “trying new things can help people develop skills,” and “it is also important to commit to one goal.” Avoid repeated phrases such as “try to try to new things” and use linking words like “because,” “however,” and “for example.” Add a specific example to make your answer more effective.

範例: I think it depends on the person and their goals. Trying different activities can help people discover new interests and develop a wider range of skills. However, they should also focus on one important goal so that they can make real progress. For example, someone might try different sports before choosing one to practise seriously.

× When I was a Um, kindergarten student every, every day I tried a new things like drawing the picture or running out the park.

✓ When I was a kindergarten student, I tried new things every day, such as drawing pictures or running in the park.

The plural noun things cannot be used with the singular article a. Also, pictures is more appropriate when referring to drawing in general. Remove a before new things and use the plural form pictures.

× When I was a Um, kindergarten student every, every day I tried a new things like drawing the picture or running out the park.

✓ When I was a kindergarten student, I tried new things every day, such as drawing pictures or running in the park.

Use the preposition in when referring to an activity taking place inside a park. Running out the park is incorrect in this context; running in the park is the appropriate expression.

× When I was a Um, kindergarten student every, every day I tried a new things like drawing the picture or running out the park.

✓ When I was a kindergarten student, I tried new things every day, such as drawing pictures or running in the park.

The article a cannot be used before the plural noun things. The article the is also unnecessary before pictures when speaking about pictures in general. Use new things and drawing pictures.

× Every place is new for me.

✓ Every place was new to me.

The answer describes the student's childhood, so the past tense was is required. The preposition to is also the usual expression in was new to me.

× I think it's a dependent on people because if you try to try to new things try new things, you can get many new skills or new information from the training, but it's also important to commitment one thing.

✓ I think it depends on the person because if you try new things, you can gain new skills and learn new information from training, but it is also important to commit to one thing.

Use the present-tense verb depends to express a general opinion. The phrase it is a dependent is incorrect because dependent is an adjective or a noun referring to a person, not the verb needed here.

× I think it's a dependent on people because if you try to try to new things try new things, you can get many new skills or new information from the training, but it's also important to commitment one thing.

✓ I think it depends on the person because if you try new things, you can gain new skills and learn new information from training, but it is also important to commit to one thing.

The verb commit is followed by the preposition to. Therefore, say commit to one thing, not commitment one thing.

× I think it's a dependent on people because if you try to try to new things try new things, you can get many new skills or new information from the training, but it's also important to commitment one thing.

✓ I think it depends on the person because if you try new things, you can gain new skills and learn new information from training, but it is also important to commit to one thing.

Many is normally used with countable plural nouns, such as skills. Information is uncountable, so do not use many directly before it. Use some information, a lot of information, or learn new information.

× I think it's a dependent on people because if you try to try to new things try new things, you can get many new skills or new information from the training, but it's also important to commitment one thing.

✓ I think it depends on the person because if you try new things, you can gain new skills and learn new information from training, but it is also important to commit to one thing.

The sentence contains repeated and incomplete phrases, including try to try to new things and important to commitment one thing. Use the complete structure it depends on the person, try new things, and it is important to commit to one thing.