机会— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Answer directly in the past tense because the question asks about childhood. Avoid repeating phrases such as “take part in” and “participate in.” Use a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific details about the dance competitions. Also, replace unclear expressions such as “standing front in the challenges” with a natural phrase like “performing on stage” or “taking on challenges.”

範例: Yes, I had several opportunities to try new activities as a child. However, I especially enjoyed taking part in dance competitions because I loved performing on stage. These experiences helped me become more confident and comfortable in front of other people.

建議: Give your opinion in a clear opening sentence and use the correct structure “as many different things as they can.” Avoid repetition, fillers, and unclear phrases such as “explore the more.” Use linking words such as “for example” and “as a result” to connect your reasons and examples. Mention specific benefits, such as discovering interests, developing skills, or becoming more confident.

範例: Yes, I think people should try as many different activities as they can. For example, cooking, swimming, and dancing can help them discover their interests and develop useful skills. As a result, they may become more confident and have a better understanding of what they enjoy.

× I have many opportunities to take take part in new activities.

✓ I had many opportunities to take part in new activities.

The question refers to the student's childhood, which is a finished period in the past. Therefore, use the past-tense verb had instead of the present-tense verb have. The repeated word take should also be removed.

× I always take participate in dance competitions.

✓ I always participated in dance competitions.

The student is describing a regular activity during childhood, so the past tense participated is needed. Do not use take before participate. Alternatively, you can say I always took part in dance competitions.

× I love dancing and when often standing front in the challenges.

✓ I loved dancing, and I often stood at the front during the competitions.

The original sentence does not have a clear grammatical structure because when is followed by an incomplete phrase, standing lacks a suitable auxiliary verb, and front needs the preposition at. Use a complete clause with the subject I and the past-tense verb stood.

× Different things makes them explore the more.

✓ Different things make people explore more.

The subject different things is plural, so it must take the plural verb make, not makes. Also, explore is not normally followed by the article the in this meaning. Use explore more.

× as like I, I, uh, do many activities like cooking, swimming, dancing, etcetera.

✓ For example, I do many activities, such as cooking, swimming, and dancing.

The expression as like I is not grammatically correct or natural in this sentence. Use For example to introduce examples, and use such as before a list of activities. Repeating I is a speech hesitation and should be removed in a polished answer.