机会— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 回答直接，并提供了具体活动和感受，这是优点。但“had a lot of activities”表达不自然，应该说“took part in many activities”；“went to Barbecue by River”应改为“went to a barbecue by the river”；“we had a very good memory”应使用过去时表达一次经历，如“it was a great memory”。另外，“relaxed”和“relaxing”重复，且需要使用连接词使细节更连贯。建议控制在3—4句，并补充活动内容或结果。

範例: Yes, I did. When I was a child, I often took part in new activities with my classmates. For example, we once had a barbecue by the river, where we prepared meat and vegetables together. It was a great memory because the atmosphere was relaxed and we had a lot of fun.

建議: 回答表达了明确观点，也给出了编程的例子，但存在较多语法和搭配问题。“For most of times”应改为“Most of the time”；“give them a new chance”可以更自然地说“create new opportunities”；“try try to code”应改为“try coding”；“I would like proud them”应改为“I would be proud of them”或“I would encourage them”；“good job opportunities”前应使用“better”。此外，最后一句“they should value the chance either”意思不清，建议改为“they should choose activities that suit their interests and abilities”。使用“However”连接例外情况，答案会更有逻辑。

範例: Most of the time, I encourage people to try different things because doing so can create new opportunities. For instance, if someone is interested in coding, I would encourage them to take a basic course, as this skill could lead to better job opportunities. However, people should choose activities that match their interests and abilities rather than trying everything blindly.

× For example, we went to Barbecue by River.

✓ For example, we went to a barbecue by the river.

可数名词“barbecue”在这里表示一次烧烤活动，前面需要使用不定冠词“a”。“river”在特定语境中通常使用定冠词“the”，所以应说“the river”。

× The meat and vegetables were tasty and the whole day felt relaxed, felt relaxing.

✓ The meat and vegetables were tasty, and the whole day felt relaxing.

“relaxed”通常描述人的心理状态，表示“感到放松的”；“relaxing”描述事物具有令人放松的特点。这里的主语是“the whole day”，所以应使用“relaxing”。同时，不需要重复使用“felt”。

× For most of times I encourage people to try new things.

✓ Most of the time, I encourage people to try new things.

表示“通常、大多数时候”时，固定表达是“most of the time”，其中“time”前需要使用定冠词“the”。句首不需要使用“for”。

× If someone wants to try try to code, I would like proud them.

✓ If someone wants to try coding, I would be proud of them.

“try”后面可以接动名词“trying/coding”来表示“尝试做某事”。这里出现了重复的“try”，应改为“try coding”。此外，后半句还缺少系动词“be”，并且“proud”后面需要接介词“of”。

× I would like proud them.

✓ I would be proud of them.

“proud”是形容词，不能直接放在“would like”后面。这里需要使用系动词结构“would be proud”，形成完整句子。

× I would like proud them.

✓ I would be proud of them.

形容词“proud”后面通常搭配介词“of”，表示“为某人感到自豪”，所以应说“proud of them”，不能说“proud them”。

× But they should value the chance either.

✓ But they should value the chance too.

“either”通常用于否定句，表示“也不”。这里是肯定句，应使用“too”或“as well”，表示“也”。