机会— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Answer the question directly using the past tense, since you are talking about your childhood. Avoid repeating words such as “function,” “opportunity,” and “participate,” and use more natural expressions such as “take part in school activities” or “join competitions.” Organize your answer with a clear topic sentence, followed by one specific example and its result. Keep the answer to three or four clear sentences and use linking words such as “for example,” “as a result,” or “because.”

範例: Yes, I had several opportunities to try new activities as a child. For example, I took part in school competitions and cultural events, and sometimes I won trophies with my team. These experiences helped me become more confident and taught me how to work with other children.

建議: State your opinion clearly in the first sentence, then explain two benefits without repeating the same idea. Use natural phrases such as “gain knowledge,” “develop useful skills,” and “solve problems more easily” instead of “have many types of work” and “knowledge about different work.” Correct the grammar by using “people can learn” rather than “people have to learn and learn,” and “problems” rather than “program.” Add a specific example to make your answer more effective, and connect your ideas with “also,” “for example,” or “therefore.”

範例: Yes, I think people should try a variety of activities because this helps them discover their interests and develop new skills. For example, someone who tries sports, music, and volunteer work may find a talent or career interest that they did not know they had. In addition, these experiences can help people become more adaptable and solve problems more effectively.

× Yes, I have a many opportunities when I were a child because when I do any participate in any function, there was very opportunity for us and when we win the function, we win the trophy or when there were a function of children.

✓ Yes, I had many opportunities when I was a child because whenever I participated in an activity, there were many opportunities for us. When we won, we received a trophy, especially when there was a children’s event.

The question asks about childhood, so the answer should use the past tense. Use had instead of have, was instead of were, participated instead of do participate, won instead of win, and was instead of were for the past event.

× Yes, I have a many opportunities when I were a child because when I do any participate in any function, there was very opportunity for us and when we win the function, we win the trophy or when there were a function of children.

✓ Yes, I had many opportunities when I was a child because whenever I participated in an activity, there were many opportunities for us. When we won, we received a trophy, especially when there was a children’s event.

Many is used directly before a plural countable noun, so a many opportunities is incorrect. Also, very cannot be used as a determiner before opportunity; use many opportunities or a great opportunity instead.

× Yes, I have a many opportunities when I were a child because when I do any participate in any function, there was very opportunity for us and when we win the function, we win the trophy or when there were a function of children.

✓ Yes, I had many opportunities when I was a child because whenever I participated in an activity, there were many opportunities for us. When we won, we received a trophy, especially when there was a children’s event.

In a there be construction, the verb agrees with the noun that follows it. Use there were many opportunities because opportunities is plural, but use there was a children’s event because event is singular.

× Yes, I have a many opportunities when I were a child because when I do any participate in any function, there was very opportunity for us and when we win the function, we win the trophy or when there were a function of children.

✓ Yes, I had many opportunities when I was a child because whenever I participated in an activity, there were many opportunities for us. When we won, we received a trophy, especially when there was a children’s event.

The original sentence combines several incomplete and unclear clauses with repeated when and because structures. Separate the ideas into complete sentences and use whenever to introduce a repeated past situation.

× So I participate in that function and it is very important for the life of children.

✓ So, I participated in that activity, and it was very important in children’s lives.

The answer describes a past childhood experience, so use the past-tense forms participated and was instead of participate and is.

× So I participate in that function and it is very important for the life of children.

✓ So, I participated in that activity, and it was very important in children’s lives.

The general meaning refers to the lives of children, so the plural form lives is more appropriate than the singular phrase the life of children.

× Yes, people should try many different things because if people try many different things they have a many types of work, have to learn and learn and knowledge about different work.

✓ Yes, people should try many different things because they can learn about many types of work and gain knowledge about different kinds of work.

Do not use a before the plural quantifier many. Say many types of work, not a many types of work. The corrected sentence also avoids repeating learn and makes the relationship between the ideas clear.

× Yes, people should try many different things because if people try many different things they have a many types of work, have to learn and learn and knowledge about different work.

✓ Yes, people should try many different things because they can learn about many types of work and gain knowledge about different kinds of work.

The original sentence has several verbs and noun phrases connected without a complete grammatical structure. Use parallel verb phrases, learn about and gain knowledge about, after the subject they.

× Because the knowledge about different work is very important in life and it is very easy to solve program in their life and when they have any problem they can solve problem in easy and in short time period.

✓ Knowledge about different types of work is very important in life. It helps people solve problems in their lives easily and in a short period of time. When they have a problem, they can solve it quickly.

The original begins with Because, but it does not provide a properly connected main clause, so the sentence is difficult to follow. Dividing it into complete sentences makes the ideas and clause relationships clear.

× Because the knowledge about different work is very important in life and it is very easy to solve program in their life and when they have any problem they can solve problem in easy and in short time period.

✓ Knowledge about different types of work is very important in life. It helps people solve problems in their lives easily and in a short period of time. When they have a problem, they can solve it quickly.

Easy is an adjective, but it modifies a noun. To describe how people solve problems, use the adverb easily. Quickly is also an appropriate adverb for describing the action of solving a problem.

× Because the knowledge about different work is very important in life and it is very easy to solve program in their life and when they have any problem they can solve problem in easy and in short time period.

✓ Knowledge about different types of work is very important in life. It helps people solve problems in their lives easily and in a short period of time. When they have a problem, they can solve it quickly.

The pronoun their refers to people, so it should be used with the plural noun lives. In the final clause, use it to refer back to the singular noun problem instead of repeating problem.

× Because the knowledge about different work is very important in life and it is very easy to solve program in their life and when they have any problem they can solve problem in easy and in short time period.

✓ Knowledge about different types of work is very important in life. It helps people solve problems in their lives easily and in a short period of time. When they have a problem, they can solve it quickly.

Knowledge is used here as an uncountable noun in a general sense, so it does not need the. Use a problem when referring to one unspecified problem, and use a short period of time rather than in short time period.