机会— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Answer the question directly in the past tense and describe one specific new activity or place. Correct the grammar: use “another district” or “a different area,” “They took me,” “I had never seen before,” and “I felt.” Avoid repetition such as “I go to I go with them.” Use a linking word such as “because” to explain why the experience was memorable.

範例: Yes, I had several opportunities to try new activities as a child. For example, my parents often took me to different districts, where I visited places I had never seen before. I felt excited because everything was new, and these trips helped me become more curious about the world.

建議: Give a clear opinion at the beginning and support it with one or two well-developed reasons. Improve the word order and grammar: say “as many different things as possible,” “develop new skills,” and “improve their lives.” Use more natural examples, such as learning a language, playing a sport, or taking up a creative hobby. Avoid unclear phrases like “it will come to be their new skills.”

範例: Yes, I think people should try as many different things as possible, although they do not need to enjoy everything they try. New activities can help them develop useful skills and discover their interests. For example, learning a language can improve their communication skills, while playing a sport can make them healthier and more confident.

× When I was young I had opportunities to go another district with my parents.

✓ When I was young, I had opportunities to go to another district with my parents.

The preposition to is needed before a destination. Use go to + place when describing movement toward a location.

× They bring me to somewhere that I never seen before.

✓ They brought me to somewhere that I had never seen before.

The story is about the past, so bring must change to its past-tense form, brought. The past perfect form had never seen shows that not seeing the place happened before that past trip.

× They bring me to somewhere that I never seen before.

✓ They brought me to somewhere that I had never seen before.

Seen is a past participle and cannot be used alone with I. It needs the auxiliary verb had in the past perfect structure had never seen.

× I feel so excited and comfortable that I go to I go with them.

✓ I felt so excited and comfortable that I wanted to go with them.

Because the answer describes a childhood experience, the verbs should be in the past tense: felt and wanted. The repeated phrase I go to I go is also removed to express the intended meaning clearly.

× I feel so excited and comfortable that I go to I go with them.

✓ I felt so excited and comfortable that I wanted to go with them.

The original sentence contains an incomplete and repeated structure, I go to I go. Use the pattern so + adjective + that + subject + verb to show a result: I felt ... that I wanted ...

× I think they should try different many different things because it will come to be their new skills as language or something that improved their life, such as engineering skills and language practice.

✓ I think they should try many different things because they can develop new skills, such as engineering and language skills, that can improve their lives.

Many must come before the adjective different, so the correct phrase is many different things. Avoid combining different many different. Also, skills is a plural countable noun, so many is an appropriate quantifier.

× I think they should try different many different things because it will come to be their new skills as language or something that improved their life, such as engineering skills and language practice.

✓ I think they should try many different things because they can develop new skills, such as engineering and language skills, that can improve their lives.

The sentence expresses a general benefit, so improve should be in the present form rather than the past form improved. The modal can is followed by the base form improve.

× I think they should try different many different things because it will come to be their new skills as language or something that improved their life, such as engineering skills and language practice.

✓ I think they should try many different things because they can develop new skills, such as engineering and language skills, that can improve their lives.

The subject they refers to multiple people, so the possessive noun should also be plural: lives, not life. Use plural forms when the meaning refers to the lives of several people.