机会— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Answer the question directly and avoid fillers such as “like,” “so,” and “with that.” The phrase “curricular activities” is less natural here; use “extracurricular activities” or “school activities.” Use the past tense consistently, and complete the final idea by explaining how these activities benefited you. Organize the answer with a clear topic sentence and one specific result.

範例: Yes, I had plenty of opportunities to try new activities as a child, especially at school. I played hockey, football, and basketball, and I also took part in several other sports. These activities helped me become more physically active and taught me how to cooperate with my classmates.

建議: Your opinion is clear, but the answer repeats “every day,” “new things,” and “unique things.” Replace fillers such as “so like” and “just like” with precise linking words such as “because” and “as a result.” Use more natural expressions, such as “broaden their horizons” or “discover new interests,” and include one specific example to make the answer more effective.

範例: Yes, I believe people should try a variety of activities because this allows them to discover new interests and develop useful skills. For example, someone who takes up a new sport may improve their fitness and make new friends. It can also broaden their horizons and make life more interesting.

× So in my school time like we used to play hockey, we used to play football, we used to play basketball and so many other games.

✓ So, during my school years, we used to play hockey, football, basketball, and many other games.

The preposition in is not natural with school time in this context. Use during before a period such as during my school years. Also, used to already shows a repeated past activity, so repeating play is unnecessary.

× With that like it creates a good understanding of physical activities which help

✓ These activities helped us develop a good understanding of physical activities.

The answer refers to childhood experiences, so the past tense helped is more appropriate than the present-tense creates. The original sentence is also incomplete; it needs a complete verb phrase and an object.

× With that like it creates a good understanding of physical activities which help

✓ These activities helped us develop a good understanding of physical activities, which helps us stay physically active.

The relative clause which help does not clearly agree with its intended subject. If which refers to the singular noun understanding, the verb should be helps. If it refers to activities, the meaning should be expressed more clearly. Rewriting the sentence avoids this agreement problem.

× So like if you want to learn more and more every day, just like go for new things, unique things because it helps you to understand new world.

✓ So, if you want to learn more every day, try new and unique things because they help you understand the world better.

World is a specific, commonly known noun, so it requires the definite article the. The pronoun they is also needed because it refers to the plural noun things. The sentence has been slightly reorganized to make the grammar clear while preserving the original meaning.