机会— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Answer directly by saying that you had few opportunities, and then explain why. Use the correct preposition in “during my childhood” or “in my childhood,” and maintain the past tense: “There were limited activities.” Also, replace the unnatural phrase “My main activity was to go to school” with a more natural expression such as “Most of my time was spent going to school.” Add one specific example to make the answer more informative.

範例: No, I didn’t have many opportunities to try new activities during my childhood. I grew up in a mountainous rural area, where there were very few facilities or organized activities for children. Most of my time was spent going to school and helping my family at home.

建議: State your opinion clearly and avoid repeating “many things” and “different things.” Use the correct structure “focus on one thing,” and use a gender-neutral pronoun such as “they” instead of “he.” Your final sentence is incomplete, so connect your ideas with a linking word such as “However.” Explain that people should explore a few options but eventually concentrate on the one that suits them best.

範例: I don’t think people should try too many different things at the same time. In my opinion, they should explore a few options first and then focus on the activity that suits them best. This allows them to develop their skills more deeply, although they can always try something new if their original choice doesn’t work out.

× No, I didn't have any opportunities at my childhood.

✓ No, I didn't have any opportunities during my childhood.

The preposition at is not used naturally with childhood in this context. Use during my childhood or in my childhood to refer to a period of time.

× There is a limited activity.

✓ There were only a few activities.

The sentence refers to the student's childhood, so the past form were is needed. Also, the plural noun activities is more appropriate because the student is discussing multiple possible activities.

× There is a limited activity.

✓ There were only a few activities.

The phrase a limited activity suggests one specific activity, but the intended meaning is that there were not many activities. Use the plural form activities with a few.

× There is a limited activity.

✓ There were only a few activities.

The answer describes the student's childhood, which is a finished period in the past. Therefore, use the past-tense form were instead of the present-tense form is.

× People have to focus one thing.

✓ People have to focus on one thing.

The verb focus is followed by the preposition on when it means to give attention to something. The correct collocation is focus on something.

× If that thing fails, then he can continue to to another one.

✓ If that thing fails, then they can continue to another one.

The noun people is plural and gender-neutral, so it should be replaced by they, not he. The repeated to should also be removed. In this context, continue to another one is grammatically acceptable, although move on to another one is more natural.

× But trying different new things.

✓ But trying different new things is not always a good idea.

The original sentence is a fragment because it does not contain a complete main verb and does not express a complete thought. Add a main verb, such as is, to make it a complete sentence.