机会— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Answer the question directly and add a specific explanation. Correct the phrase “as child” to “as a child.” Also, clarify the relationship between not trying new activities and playing cricket, since cricket may have been a regular activity rather than a new one. Use a linking phrase such as “However” to make the contrast clearer.

範例: No, I didn’t have many opportunities to try new activities as a child. My parents were quite busy, so I mostly stayed at home and played cricket with my friends. However, I really enjoyed it and would have liked to try activities such as swimming or painting.

建議: Give a clear opinion and support it with a specific reason or example. The sentence is understandable, but it would be more natural to say “the more they learn and the more culturally aware they become.” Add an example to make the answer more developed and avoid relying only on a repeated comparative structure.

範例: Absolutely. I think people should try a variety of activities because this helps them discover their interests and become more open-minded. For example, travelling to different countries or learning a foreign language can help people understand other cultures better.

× No, I didn't have any opportunities to take part in new activities as child, although I used to play cricket a lot.

✓ No, I didn't have any opportunities to take part in new activities as a child, although I used to play cricket a lot.

The singular countable noun child requires an article in this expression. Use as a child when referring generally to the period when someone was young. Improvement suggestion: remember to use a or an before a singular countable noun when it is not preceded by another determiner.

× Absolutely, the more people try new things the more they learn, the more they become culturally aware.

✓ Absolutely. The more new things people try, the more they learn and the more culturally aware they become.

The original sentence contains several comparative clauses joined by commas, which makes the structure difficult to follow. The correlative pattern the more..., the more... should be clearly organized, and and can connect the final two results. Improvement suggestion: use a full stop after an introductory response such as Absolutely, add a comma after the first the more clause, and use parallel structures in a series.