机会— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Answer the question directly using the past tense, because it asks about your childhood. Avoid unnatural phrases such as “activate on sports” and “available for me always.” Use “take part in” or “try” instead. Give one or two specific examples and explain briefly why you enjoyed them. Also, avoid repeating “sports” and “activities.”

範例: Yes, I did. I had plenty of free time as a child, so I often tried activities such as swimming and basketball. I especially enjoyed basketball because I could play it with my friends after school.

建議: State your opinion clearly and complete your answer; the response currently ends unfinished. The phrase “the variety of people” is incorrect and unclear—use “being open to different experiences” or “having a wide range of experiences.” Support your opinion with a specific reason and example, and use linking words such as “because,” “for example,” and “as a result.”

範例: Yes, I think people should try a variety of activities whenever possible. It helps them discover their interests and develop useful skills. For example, someone who tries a new sport or joins a club may become more confident and make new friends.

× Yeah, of course I have since I have a lot of leisure time for me to activate on those sports and these the activities such as sports is really available for me always.

✓ Yeah, of course I did, because I had a lot of leisure time as a child to participate in sports and other activities. These activities were always available to me.

The question asks about your childhood, so you should use the past tense. Use did instead of have and had instead of have. This keeps the answer consistent with the past time reference.

× Yeah, of course I have since I have a lot of leisure time for me to activate on those sports and these the activities such as sports is really available for me always.

✓ Yeah, of course I did, because I had a lot of leisure time as a child to participate in sports and other activities. These activities were always available to me.

The expression activate on those sports is not grammatically or idiomatically correct. Use participate in sports or take part in sports. The preposition in is used after participate.

× Yeah, of course I have since I have a lot of leisure time for me to activate on those sports and these the activities such as sports is really available for me always.

✓ Yeah, of course I did, because I had a lot of leisure time as a child to participate in sports and other activities. These activities were always available to me.

Sports and activities are plural nouns, so they need plural verb forms. Use are available rather than is available when the subject is these activities.

× Yeah, of course I have since I have a lot of leisure time for me to activate on those sports and these the activities such as sports is really available for me always.

✓ Yeah, of course I did, because I had a lot of leisure time as a child to participate in sports and other activities. These activities were always available to me.

Do not use both these and the before the same noun. These is already a determiner, so say these activities, not these the activities.

× Yeah, of course I have since I have a lot of leisure time for me to activate on those sports and these the activities such as sports is really available for me always.

✓ Yeah, of course I did, because I had a lot of leisure time as a child to participate in sports and other activities. These activities were always available to me.

The adverb always is placed awkwardly at the end of the original sentence. In the corrected sentence, always comes before the adjective available in the phrase were always available.

× People should try different things they can because the variety of people it's one of the most important skills that they have to have. And the other thing is people should always do

✓ People should try as many different things as they can because trying a variety of things is one of the most important skills they should develop. Another reason is that people should always try new things.

The original sentence contains an incorrect structure with two subjects: the variety of people and it's. Use trying a variety of things as the subject and is as the verb. The final part is incomplete, so it needs a complete clause, such as people should always try new things.

× People should try different things they can because the variety of people it's one of the most important skills that they have to have. And the other thing is people should always do

✓ People should try as many different things as they can because trying a variety of things is one of the most important skills they should develop. Another reason is that people should always try new things.

The phrase And the other thing is people should always do is unfinished because do has no complement and the idea is incomplete. Complete the sentence with a meaningful verb phrase, such as should always try new things.