机会— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Answer the question directly by mentioning one or two specific activities you tried as a child. Avoid repeating general ideas such as “opportunities” and “activities.” Improve grammar by using the past tense (“I had,” “I tried,” and “I learned”) and correct collocations such as “take part in,” not “take apart.” Organize the answer into a clear topic sentence followed by a reason or result, using a linker such as “because” or “as a result.”

範例: Yes, I had several opportunities to try new activities as a child, especially at school. For example, I joined a drawing club and learned that I really enjoyed being creative. As a result, I continued drawing in my free time.

建議: Give a clear opinion at the beginning, such as “Yes, I think people should try different activities.” Avoid repeating “new things” and “various things.” Use accurate grammar and natural expressions, including “learn more about themselves,” “learn from other people,” and “I used to dislike cooking.” Your personal example is relevant, but explain the result more clearly—for example, how learning from your mother changed your attitude toward cooking.

範例: Yes, I think people should try a variety of activities because this helps them discover their interests and develop new skills. For instance, I recently learned to cook from my mother, even though I used to dislike cooking. Now I enjoy preparing simple meals and feel much more independent.

× Of course as child we are have many kind of opportunities to take apart new activities.

✓ Of course, as a child, we had many kinds of opportunities to take part in new activities.

The singular countable noun child needs the article a. The plural noun opportunities requires the plural form kinds before it. Also, the correct expression is take part in, not take apart.

× Of course as child we are have many kind of opportunities to take apart new activities which we can learn will get to know if we are interested in it or we are good at something which we can continue further also for our future.

✓ Of course, as a child, we had many kinds of opportunities to take part in new activities, through which we could learn and find out whether we were interested in something or good at it and could continue with it in the future.

The question asks about childhood, so the main verbs should be in the past tense: had, could, and were. The form we are have is grammatically incorrect because it combines an incorrect present form with have.

× Of course as child we are have many kind of opportunities to take apart new activities.

✓ Of course, as a child, we had many kinds of opportunities to take part in new activities.

The fixed expression is take part in an activity, meaning participate in it. Take apart means separate something into pieces, so it has a different meaning.

× Of course as child we are have many kind of opportunities to take apart new activities which we can learn will get to know if we are interested in it or we are good at something which we can continue further also for our future.

✓ Of course, as a child, we had many kinds of opportunities to take part in new activities. Through these activities, we could learn more and find out whether we were interested in them or good at something that we could continue in the future.

The original sentence contains several clauses joined without clear grammatical connections. Dividing it into two sentences and using through these activities and whether makes the relationships between the ideas clear.

× So as a child we should always have to take part in your activities and there are a lot of opportunities we get.

✓ So, as children, we should always take part in activities, and there were many opportunities available to us.

The pronoun your refers to the listener, but the speaker is talking about children in general. The more appropriate wording is activities. The phrase available to us also clearly identifies who had the opportunities.

× So as a child we should always have to take part in your activities.

✓ So, as children, we should always take part in activities.

Should is already a modal verb expressing advice or obligation. It should be followed directly by the base form of the verb, take, not have to take in this sentence.

× So as a child we should always have to take part in your activities and there are a lot of opportunities we get.

✓ So, as children, we should always take part in activities, and there were many opportunities available to us.

The answer describes the student's childhood, so the past form were is more suitable than the present form are. The phrase available to us also gives the sentence a complete and natural past-time meaning.

× As we get opportunities people should try new things various things so that we will get to know some more things about themselves will be able to learn more good things new things from someone else also.

✓ When people have opportunities, they should try various new things so that they can learn more about themselves and learn new things from other people.

People is plural, so the sentence should use the plural pronoun they. The original sentence also repeats things unnecessarily. Using various new things and new things from other people avoids the repetition and keeps the plural meaning clear.

× As we get opportunities people should try new things various things so that we will get to know some more things about themselves will be able to learn more good things new things from someone else also.

✓ When people have opportunities, they should try various new things so that they can learn more about themselves and learn new things from other people.

This sentence expresses a general recommendation, so can is more appropriate than will. The subject they must also be repeated before can learn to make the sentence grammatically complete.

× As we get opportunities people should try new things various things so that we will get to know some more things about themselves will be able to learn more good things new things from someone else also.

✓ When people have opportunities, they should try various new things so that they can learn more about themselves and learn new things from other people.

The original sentence changes from the subject we to the subject people without a clear grammatical connection. Replacing we will with they can keeps the pronouns consistent with people.

× As we get opportunities people should try new things various things so that we will get to know some more things about themselves will be able to learn more good things new things from someone else also.

✓ When people have opportunities, they should try various new things so that they can learn more about themselves and learn new things from other people.

The two benefits need to be connected with the conjunction and: learn more about themselves and learn new things. Without a conjunction, the original sentence contains two clauses that are incorrectly joined.

× For example, I have started learning cooking from my mom that I used to not like for cooking but now I started cooking.

✓ For example, I have started learning to cook from my mom. I did not use to like cooking, but now I enjoy it.

After learning, the infinitive learning to cook is the natural form when referring to acquiring the skill of cooking. The original phrase learning cooking is unnatural in this context.

× For example, I have started learning cooking from my mom that I used to not like for cooking but now I started cooking.

✓ For example, I have started learning to cook from my mom. I did not use to like cooking, but now I enjoy it.

The expression like cooking does not require the preposition for. The phrase like for cooking is incorrect; use like cooking or like to cook instead.

× For example, I have started learning cooking from my mom that I used to not like for cooking but now I started cooking.

✓ For example, I have started learning to cook from my mom. I did not use to like cooking, but now I enjoy it.

The answer describes a present change in the speaker's preference. Enjoy it is a natural present-tense form showing the current situation, while now I started cooking does not clearly express the present result.

× For example, I have started learning cooking from my mom that I used to not like for cooking but now I started cooking.

✓ For example, I have started learning to cook from my mom. I did not use to like cooking, but now I enjoy it.

The original sentence incorrectly uses that to connect several unrelated ideas. Separating the example into two sentences and using but to show the contrast makes the structure clearer and grammatically complete.