机会— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Cevabınız soruya doğrudan yanıt veriyor ve spor ile dans gibi örnekler içeriyor. Ancak cümle “but” ile yarım kaldığı için akıcılık ve doğallık azalıyor. “Apply for sports” yerine “try different sports” veya “take part in different sports” kullanmalısınız; ayrıca “I continued those sports a while” ifadesi yerine “I continued them for a while” demelisiniz. Cevabı iki veya üç tamamlanmış cümleyle bitirerek dans dersinin size ne kattığını belirtin.

範例: Yes, I had several opportunities to try new activities when I was a child. For example, I took part in different sports and continued playing some of them for a while. I also attended a dancing class, which helped me become more confident and active.

建議: Ana fikriniz anlaşılır ve neden sunmanız olumlu; ancak “from the childhood” yerine “from childhood” veya “from an early age” kullanılmalı. “In time people can understand what they like more” ifadesini “over time, people can discover what they enjoy” şeklinde daha doğal söyleyebilirsiniz. “Create a character for” doğru bir kullanım değildir; bunun yerine “shape their personality” veya “help develop their character” kullanın. Ayrıca “because” sonrasında iki fikri daha düzenli bağlamak için “For example” gibi bir bağlayıcı ekleyip belirli bir sonuç verin.

範例: Yes, I think people should try a variety of activities from an early age. By doing so, they can discover what they enjoy and develop different skills over time. For example, trying team sports may help them become more cooperative, while learning music can improve their concentration.

× For example I applied for different sports and I continued those sports a while.

✓ For example, I applied for different sports and continued those sports for a while.

The phrase a while requires the preposition for when it expresses a duration. Use for a while, for two years, or for several months.

× I also attended a dancing class, but

✓ I also attended a dancing class.

But is a conjunction that connects two contrasting clauses. In this sentence, but is left without a second clause, so the sentence is incomplete. Remove but unless you continue the sentence, for example: I also attended a dancing class, but I did not enjoy it.

× I think it's important to try different things from the childhood because in time people can understand what they like more and different hobbies can be useful to create a character for.

✓ I think it's important to try different things from childhood because, over time, people can understand what they like more and different hobbies can be useful to create a character for.

Childhood is used as an uncountable general concept, so it does not normally take the definite article the. Say from childhood, not from the childhood.

× I think it's important to try different things from the childhood because in time people can understand what they like more and different hobbies can be useful to create a character for.

✓ I think it's important to try different things from childhood because, over time, people can understand what they like more, and different hobbies can help them develop their character.

The phrase create a character for is structurally incomplete because for has no object. A clearer structure is help them develop their character. Make sure every preposition has an object and that the sentence ends with a complete idea.