机会— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Answer the question directly in the first sentence, but avoid repeating “active” and “activities.” The phrase “such activities which included sports” is awkward; say “especially sports” instead. Use one clear linking word, such as “As a result,” and add a specific detail about one activity to make the answer more vivid and effective. Although the answer is within the five-sentence limit, it could be more concise and natural.

範例: Yes, I had plenty of opportunities to try new activities as a child because my parents were very active. They encouraged me to take up sports, so I tried dancing, swimming, and running. I particularly enjoyed swimming because it helped me become more confident and energetic.

建議: State your opinion more naturally and directly instead of using the wordy phrase “I would definitely have to agree with the fact that.” Avoid repeating “experience” and “can.” Explain one or two specific benefits, such as discovering personal interests or developing useful skills, and support your idea with a brief example. Use a linking phrase such as “For example” rather than relying on “Therefore” to connect general ideas.

範例: Yes, I think people should try a variety of activities because it helps them discover their interests and develop useful skills. For example, someone who joins a public-speaking club may become more confident and improve their communication skills. These experiences can also help people make better decisions about their future.

× So I mostly did dancing, swimming, and running.

✓ So I mostly danced, swam, and ran.

The question refers to activities you did in the past, so use simple past verbs in a parallel list. Danced, swam, and ran are the past-tense forms of dance, swim, and run. Using three past-tense verbs also makes the sentence more grammatically consistent and natural.