机会— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Câu trả lời đi đúng trọng tâm và có ví dụ cụ thể là lớp karate, nhưng có một số lỗi ngữ pháp và dùng từ: “had an opportunity” nên đổi thành “had the opportunity” hoặc “got the chance”; “join in a karate class” tự nhiên hơn là “join a karate class”; “At first I was loved” có lẽ muốn nói “At first, I was afraid” hoặc “At first, I didn’t enjoy it”; “I felt very interesting” phải đổi thành “I found it very interesting” hoặc “I became very interested in it”; “protecting myself” nên dùng “self-defence”. Hãy sắp xếp câu trả lời theo cấu trúc: trả lời trực tiếp, mô tả hoạt động, nêu cảm nhận ban đầu và kết quả. Dùng từ nối như “However” để liên kết ý và tránh diễn đạt không tự nhiên.

範例: Yes, I did. When I was a child, I had the opportunity to join a karate class near my house. At first, I was a little nervous, but I soon found it very interesting. It helped me become more confident and taught me some useful self-defence skills.

建議: Bạn đã trả lời trực tiếp và đưa ra lý do phù hợp, nhưng câu trả lời chỉ có một câu quá dài và chứa nhiều lỗi kết hợp từ. “as many different things as they can” cần có “try”: “try as many different things as they can”; “step out from their comfort zone” tự nhiên hơn là “step outside their comfort zone”; “build resilient” phải là “build resilience” hoặc “become more resilient”; “which can have them improve their self” nên đổi thành “which can help them improve themselves”. Hãy chia ý thành 3–4 câu ngắn, dùng từ nối như “For example” hoặc “As a result”, đồng thời bổ sung một ví dụ cụ thể để phát triển câu trả lời và làm lập luận thuyết phục hơn.

範例: Yes, I think people should try as many different things as they can. Trying new activities helps them step outside their comfort zone and become more resilient. For example, learning a new sport can improve both their confidence and social skills. As a result, they may discover new interests and become more independent.

× At first I was loved, but then I felt very interesting.

✓ At first, I loved it, but then I found it very interesting.

The passive form was loved means that someone loved the speaker. Here, the speaker means that they enjoyed the karate class, so the active form I loved it is needed. Also, it is more natural to say found it very interesting when describing an activity.

× At first I was loved, but then I felt very interesting.

✓ At first, I loved it, but then I felt very interested.

Interesting describes something that causes interest, while interested describes a person's feeling. Because the student is describing their own feeling, interested is the correct adjective.

× They should try many different things as they can because trying new things will help them step out from their comfort zone and build resilient, which can have them improve their self.

✓ They should try as many different things as they can because trying new things will help them step out from their comfort zone and build resilience, which can help them improve themselves.

The correct quantifier structure is as many + plural countable noun + as. Therefore, many different things as they can should be changed to as many different things as they can.

× They should try many different things as they can because trying new things will help them step out from their comfort zone and build resilient, which can have them improve their self.

✓ They should try as many different things as they can because trying new things will help them step out of their comfort zone and build resilience, which can help them improve themselves.

The fixed expression is step out of something, not step out from something, when referring to leaving a comfort zone. Remember the collocation step out of your comfort zone.

× They should try many different things as they can because trying new things will help them step out from their comfort zone and build resilient, which can have them improve their self.

✓ They should try as many different things as they can because trying new things will help them step out of their comfort zone and build resilience, which can help them improve themselves.

Resilient is an adjective, but the verb build requires a noun in this sentence. The noun resilience is the correct form. A useful pattern is build + noun, such as build confidence, build strength, or build resilience.

× They should try many different things as they can because trying new things will help them step out from their comfort zone and build resilient, which can have them improve their self.

✓ They should try as many different things as they can because trying new things will help them step out of their comfort zone and build resilience, which can help them improve themselves.

When the object refers back to the plural subject them, the reflexive pronoun themselves is required. Their self is incorrect in this context. Use myself, yourself, himself, herself, itself, ourselves, yourselves, or themselves according to the subject.

× They should try many different things as they can because trying new things will help them step out from their comfort zone and build resilient, which can have them improve their self.

✓ They should try as many different things as they can because trying new things will help them step out of their comfort zone and build resilience, which can help them improve themselves.

The phrase have them improve is grammatically possible in some contexts, but it is not the appropriate structure here. The intended meaning is that trying new things supports their improvement, so help them improve themselves is clearer and more natural. Use help + object + base verb for this meaning.