机会— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Answer the question directly and avoid repeating “Yeah.” Also, use natural activity names such as “cycling” instead of “bicycle cycling.” Organize the activities in a clear list and add one specific detail, such as who introduced you to the activity or which one you enjoyed most. Use a linking word such as “For example” or “especially” to make the answer more coherent.

範例: Yes, I had several opportunities to try new activities as a child. For example, I learned to swim, ride a bicycle, and dance at school and in weekend classes. I especially enjoyed swimming because it was both fun and useful.

建議: Give a clear reason without repeating “explore new.” The phrase “new pisto” is unclear, so replace it with a precise idea such as “new possibilities” or “new interests.” Develop the answer with a specific result or example, and connect your ideas with “because,” “for example,” or “as a result.”

範例: Yes, I think people should try a variety of activities because this helps them discover their interests and strengths. For example, someone who tries cooking, sports, or music may find a talent they did not know they had. It can also make life more enjoyable and broaden their experience.

× Yeah, I had many opportunities to take part in new activities like swimming or bicycle cycling, dancing. Yeah.

✓ Yeah, I had many opportunities to take part in new activities, such as swimming, cycling, and dancing.

The original sentence uses or before a list that contains three activities and then adds dancing after a comma. Use and to connect the final item in a list. Also, cycling is the natural word for riding a bicycle, so bicycle cycling is unnecessary.

× Yes, people should try different things to explore new and explore new things and new pisto.

✓ Yes, people should try different things to explore new ideas and discover new possibilities.

The original sentence repeats explore new and contains the unclear expression new pisto, which makes the sentence structurally incomplete and difficult to understand. Use two parallel verb phrases, explore new ideas and discover new possibilities, after to.