机会— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Answer the question directly and use the past tense because you are describing your childhood. Avoid repeating phrases such as “in other countries,” and make the meaning more precise: travelling abroad is not exactly the same as taking part in a new activity. Add one specific example of an activity you tried and explain how it affected you. Use linking words such as “For example” and “As a result” to organize the answer.

範例: Yes, I had several opportunities to try new activities as a child. For example, my parents often took me abroad, where I tried local sports and learned about different cultures. As a result, I became more confident and curious about the world.

建議: Give a clear opinion first, then support it with two specific and grammatically accurate reasons. Avoid repeating “because,” and replace unclear expressions such as “skill formed activities” and “find another community” with natural phrases like “develop useful skills” and “meet new people.” Use a linking word such as “Moreover” to connect your second reason, and include a brief example to make the answer more effective.

範例: Yes, I think people should try a variety of activities, although they do not need to do everything. Trying new things helps them develop useful skills and meet people with similar interests. For example, joining a sports club can improve someone’s fitness while also helping them make new friends.

× Of course I have an opportunity to take a new activity in India because my parents love to travel in other in other countries so you can explore the world in other countries.

✓ Of course, I had the opportunity to take part in new activities in India because my parents loved to travel to other countries, so I could explore the world.

The question asks about the student's childhood, so the answer should use the past tense. Use had instead of have, loved instead of love, and could instead of can. Keep the verb forms consistent with the past-time context.

× Of course I have an opportunity to take a new activity in India because my parents love to travel in other in other countries so you can explore the world in other countries.

✓ Of course, I had the opportunity to take part in new activities in India because my parents loved to travel to other countries, so I could explore the world.

Use take part in an activity rather than take an activity. Use travel to other countries, not travel in other countries, when describing movement toward a destination. Avoid repeating the preposition and country phrase.

× Of course I have an opportunity to take a new activity in India because my parents love to travel in other in other countries so you can explore the world in other countries.

✓ Of course, I had the opportunity to take part in new activities in India because my parents loved traveling to other countries, so I could explore the world.

After loved, use a gerund form when describing an activity: loved traveling. The phrase take part in new activities is also the natural verb pattern for participating in activities.

× Of course I have an opportunity to take a new activity in India because my parents love to travel in other in other countries so you can explore the world in other countries.

✓ Of course, I had the opportunity to take part in new activities in India because my parents loved traveling to other countries, so I could explore the world.

The answer is about the student's own experience, so use first-person pronouns consistently. Replace you can with I could. In a past-time answer, could is also the appropriate form.

× I think people should try as many activities as they can because Because you can get many skill formed activities and you can find another community as you could.

✓ I think people should try as many different activities as they can because they can develop many skills through these activities and find a new community as well.

Remove the repeated because and organize the sentence into one clear structure. The phrase skill formed activities is not grammatically or logically clear; use develop many skills through these activities. Also, use the consistent subject they for people.

× I think people should try as many activities as they can because Because you can get many skill formed activities and you can find another community as you could.

✓ I think people should try as many different activities as they can because they can develop many skills through these activities and find a new community as well.

The quantifier many must be followed by a plural countable noun. Therefore, use many skills, not many skill. Use different activities to make the meaning clearer.

× I think people should try as many activities as they can because Because you can get many skill formed activities and you can find another community as you could.

✓ I think people should try as many different activities as they can because they can develop many skills through these activities and find a new community as well.

The subject people should be referred to with they, not you, because the sentence is making a general statement about people. Keep the pronoun consistent throughout the sentence.