机会— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 回答基本没有直接说明你童年是否参加过新活动，而且存在明显的语法和搭配问题。例如，“I don't have memory like this”应改为“I don’t remember having opportunities like that”，“there hide many new activities in my children's heart”表达不自然。建议先直接回答“Yes/No”，然后补充一两个具体活动、时间或原因，并使用“because”“for example”等连接词。

範例: To be honest, I don’t remember having many opportunities to try new activities as a child. My parents were quite busy, so I mostly stayed at home after school. For example, I usually played with my friends in the neighborhood instead of joining clubs or classes.

建議: 你的观点是明确的，但后半部分句子结构混乱，影响理解；“people's life is used to experience”以及“if no too”都不是自然表达。建议使用清晰的结构：先表明观点，再说明原因，最后给出例子或结果。可以使用“because”“also”“for example”等连接词，并将“enjoy the fresh things”改为“experience new things”或“keep life interesting”。

範例: Yes, I think people should try a variety of activities, because new experiences help them discover their interests and abilities. They can also make life more exciting and meaningful. For example, someone who tries cooking, photography, or hiking may discover a new hobby or even a future career.

× To be honest with you, I don't have memory like this.

✓ To be honest with you, I don't have any memory of this.

“memory”是可数名词，不能在这里单独使用。表示“没有任何关于这件事的记忆”时，应使用限定词“any”，并用介词“of”连接记忆的内容。

× I don't think there hide many new activities in my children's heart.

✓ I don't think there were many new activities in my childhood.

表示“某地有某物”应使用“There be”句型。因为这里谈论的是童年时期，所以使用过去时“There were”。“hide”不能用于此处；另外，“in my childhood”比“in my children's heart”更符合题目的语境。

× I don't think there hide many new activities in my children's heart.

✓ I don't think there were many new activities in my childhood.

问题询问的是小时候的经历，应该使用过去时。“were”是“be”的过去式，并且与复数名词“many new activities”保持一致。

× I think people's life is used to experience new activities to enjoy the fresh things

✓ I think people's lives are enriched by experiencing new activities and enjoying new things.

“people”是复数名词，因此其所有格“people's”后面的名词通常应使用复数“lives”。同时，“experiencing”和“enjoying”保持平行结构，使句子更自然。

× I think people's life is used to experience new activities to enjoy the fresh things

✓ I think people's lives are enriched by experiencing new activities and enjoying new things.

介词“by”后面应接动名词，因此使用“experiencing”和“enjoying”，不能使用动词原形“experience”。两个动名词并列时，形式应保持一致。

× if no too I think it will lose more meaning also through our life

✓ If people do not try new things, their lives will lose some meaning as they go through life.

原句缺少清晰的主语、谓语和完整的条件句结构。“If”引导条件句时，应使用“If + 主语 + 动词”，主句再说明结果。建议避免把多个想法连续堆在一起，并使用逗号和连接词组织句子。