机会— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 문장 구조와 동사 사용이 불분명합니다. “I had I did designated” 대신 “I was chosen/appointed as...”와 같은 정확한 수동태 표현을 사용하세요. 질문에 직접 답한 뒤, 어떤 활동을 했는지와 그 경험이 어땠는지를 한두 문장으로 구체적으로 설명하면 좋습니다. 예를 들어 학급 대표로서 했던 일과 그 결과를 연결어로 이어 보세요.

範例: Yes, I had the opportunity to become the class leader when I was in elementary school. I organized class activities and helped my classmates communicate with the teacher. As a result, I became more responsible and confident.

建議: 의견은 제시했지만 문법과 표현을 수정해야 합니다. “make people more good person”은 “make people better people” 또는 “help people become better”로 표현하세요. 또한 다양한 활동을 시도하면 어떤 능력을 기를 수 있는지 구체적인 이유나 예시를 추가하고, “because”나 “for example” 같은 연결어를 사용해 답변을 확장하세요.

範例: Yes, I think people should try a variety of activities because challenging experiences help them become better and more adaptable. For example, joining a sports team can teach people how to cooperate with others. Even if they fail, they can learn from the experience and become more confident.

× Yes, when I was a child I had I did designated for leader of the class.

✓ Yes, when I was a child, I was designated as the leader of the class.

The student intended to say that someone selected or appointed them as the class leader. Because the subject received the action, the passive form was designated is required. The phrase had I did designated is grammatically incorrect. Use was + past participle, and use designated as someone or something.

× Yes, when I was a child I had I did designated for leader of the class.

✓ Yes, when I was a child, I was designated as the leader of the class.

The original sentence contains two unnecessary verb forms, had and did, before designated. A sentence should contain one correctly structured main verb phrase. In this sentence, use I was designated as the leader.

× Yes, when I was a child I had I did designated for leader of the class.

✓ Yes, when I was a child, I was designated as the leader of the class.

Leader is a singular countable noun, so it needs an article. Use the leader because the sentence refers to a specific role in a particular class. Also, the correct preposition after designated in this meaning is as, not for.

× Uh, yes, the difficulties make people more good person.

✓ Uh, yes, difficulties make people better.

Good has the irregular comparative form better, not more good. The phrase make people better is the natural way to express the idea that difficult experiences help people improve.

× Uh, yes, the difficulties make people more good person.

✓ Uh, yes, difficulties make people better.

Person is a singular countable noun and would require an article, but it is unnecessary in the more natural expression make people better. Also, difficulties is being used generally, so the definite article the should be omitted unless specific difficulties have already been mentioned.