机会— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Answer the question directly and avoid repetition and hesitation, such as “Yes, I did” instead of “Yes, I had.” Use accurate grammar and clearer sentence structure: say “At my school, every student had the chance to join a club, and each club organized events for its members.” Add one specific example of a club or activity to make your answer more detailed and natural.

範例: Yes, I did. At my school, every student had the chance to join a club, and each club organized events for its members. I joined the drama club, where I performed in a short play and learned how to work with a team.

建議: State your opinion clearly and use the correct expression “try as many different things as they can” rather than “try everything as they can.” Explain one or two benefits with a linking word such as “because” or “as a result.” Avoid unclear phrases like “devour their both happy and careers”; you could say “discover what makes them happy and develop their careers.”

範例: Yes, I think people should try as many different things as they can, especially when they are young. This is because new experiences help them discover what they enjoy and develop useful skills. As a result, they may find a career that suits their interests and personality.

× In our school So every student could have a a chance to join a club and each club was to hold an event for their members.

✓ At our school, every student could have a chance to join a club, and each club was to hold an event for its members.

The original sentence contains an unnecessary fragment, So, and lacks appropriate punctuation between the introductory phrase and the main clause. Use a comma after At our school and connect the two complete clauses with and.

× In our school So every student could have a a chance to join a club and each club was to hold an event for their members.

✓ At our school, every student could have a chance to join a club, and each club was to hold an event for its members.

The phrase a a chance contains a repeated article. Since chance is a singular countable noun, it should be preceded by only one article: a chance.

× In our school So every student could have a a chance to join a club and each club was to hold an event for their members.

✓ At our school, every student could have a chance to join a club, and each club was to hold an event for its members.

Each club is grammatically singular, so the corresponding possessive pronoun should be its. Use its members rather than their members in this sentence.

× Yes, I believe people should try everything as they can.

✓ Yes, I believe people should try as many different things as they can.

The question asks about trying different things, so the appropriate quantifier structure is as many different things as they can. Everything means all things and does not fit the intended comparison structure.

× So like you have a chance to to devour their both happy and careers.

✓ For example, they have a chance to develop both their happiness and their careers.

The original sentence has an incomplete and unclear structure, as well as a repeated to. The corrected version uses a complete subject and verb structure and removes the unnecessary repetition. The expression both their happiness and their careers also creates a clearer parallel structure.

× So like you have a chance to to devour their both happy and careers.

✓ For example, they have a chance to develop both their happiness and their careers.

The word both should come before the possessive determiner their: both their happiness and their careers. In addition, happy is an adjective, but happiness is the noun needed in this coordinated noun phrase.