机会— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer is clear, relevant, and well developed. You give a specific example and explain its benefit, which makes the response effective. However, say “offered music classes” rather than “offered the music classes.” You could also improve the sentence structure by adding a comma before “where” and separating the final reason into a new sentence for greater clarity.

範例: Yes, I had several opportunities to try new activities at school. My primary school offered music classes, so I joined the orchestra and learned to play the violin. I really enjoyed performing in concerts because it helped me become more confident.

建議: Your main idea and reason are clear, but the second sentence contains several incorrect or unclear expressions. Replace “miscode instruments” with “musical instruments,” “self confidence” with “self-confidence,” and “technique separate” with a natural phrase such as “improve their coordination.” Use a specific example and connect it clearly to the benefit. Also, “as many different things as possible” is slightly more natural than “as many different things as they can” in this context.

範例: Yes, I think people should try as many different activities as possible because new experiences help them develop practical skills and broaden their perspectives. For instance, learning to play a musical instrument can improve concentration, while taking up a new sport can build confidence and coordination. These experiences may also help people discover interests they never knew they had.

× My primary school offered the music classes and I joined the school orchestra where I learned to play the violin and really enjoyed performing in concert because it helped me build confidence.

✓ My primary school offered music classes, and I joined the school orchestra, where I learned to play the violin and really enjoyed performing in concerts because it helped me build confidence.

The definite article the is unnecessary before music classes when referring to classes in general. Use the only when referring to specific music classes already mentioned or clearly identified. The plural form concerts is also more natural when speaking about performing on multiple occasions.

× For example, learning a miscode instruments or trying a new sport can build self confidence and technique separate.

✓ For example, learning a musical instrument or trying a new sport can build self-confidence and develop practical skills.

The phrase a musical instrument uses the singular form because it follows the singular article a. The plural noun instruments cannot be used after a. Also, practical skills is a natural plural expression for abilities gained through activities.

× For example, learning a miscode instruments or trying a new sport can build self confidence and technique separate.

✓ For example, learning a musical instrument or trying a new sport can build self-confidence and develop practical skills.

Miscode is not the correct adjective in this context; musical describes an instrument related to music. Separate does not fit naturally after technique in this sentence. Use a clear phrase such as develop practical skills to express the intended meaning.