机会— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Answer the question directly with a clear topic sentence, such as “Yes, I had several opportunities.” Improve grammar and word choice: say “my parents supported my interests,” “extracurricular art classes,” and “violin lessons.” Avoid “like” and “well” as fillers, and use a linking phrase such as “For example” to introduce specific details. The answer is relevant, but it should be more natural and precise.

範例: Yes, I had several opportunities to try new activities as a child. My parents encouraged me to explore my interests, so they enrolled me in extracurricular art classes and violin lessons. I especially enjoyed art because it allowed me to be creative.

建議: State your opinion clearly and correct the grammatical errors. Use “If people are unsure about their interests” instead of “if they were a shy,” “new things” instead of “everything news,” and “they don’t know” instead of “there didn’t know.” Explain the result accurately: trying different activities can help people discover their interests and narrow down their choices. Use a linking word such as “because” or “As a result” and avoid repeating “try.”

範例: Yes, I think people should try a variety of activities, especially when they are unsure about their interests. By experiencing different things, they can discover what they enjoy and what they are good at. As a result, they can gradually narrow down their choices and make better decisions about their hobbies or careers.

× My parents and my family also support me from my interests and happiest.

✓ My parents and my family also support me in my interests and happiness.

The preposition from is incorrect after support in this context. Use support someone in something when describing encouragement in an area of interest. Also, happiness is the appropriate noun for the meaning, rather than the adjective happiest.

× My parents and my family also support me from my interests and happiest.

✓ My parents and my family also support me in my interests and happiness.

Happiest is a superlative adjective, but a noun is needed after my. Happiness correctly expresses the state of being happy.

× They take me to car extra curriculum classes for arts and take me to the violin class as well.

✓ They took me to extracurricular art classes and took me to violin classes as well.

The question asks about opportunities you had as a child, so the answer should use the past tense. Change take to took.

× If they were a shy, they should like try everything news.

✓ If they are shy, they should try new things.

Shy is an adjective and cannot be used with the article a in this sentence. Say they are shy, not they are a shy.

× If they were a shy, they should like try everything news.

✓ If they are shy, they should try new things.

This sentence gives general advice, so the present tense are is more appropriate than the past-tense form were.

× They should like try everything news.

✓ They should try new things.

After the modal verb should, use the base form of the verb directly. Therefore, say should try, not should like try.

× They should like try everything news.

✓ They should try new things.

News is a noun meaning current information. The adjective new is needed to describe things, so the correct phrase is new things.

× Because there didn't know what they want to do or what they would like.

✓ Because they do not know what they want to do or what they would like.

There is used to refer to a place or to introduce the existence of something. The subject here refers to people, so use the pronoun they.

× Because there didn't know what they want to do or what they would like.

✓ Because they do not know what they want to do or what they would like.

The sentence describes a general situation, so use the present-tense form do not know rather than the past-tense form did not know.

× So try as much as they can help them to scope down their.

✓ Trying as many different things as they can helps them narrow down their options.

The original sentence does not have a clear grammatical structure, and their is incomplete because it needs a noun after it. The revised sentence uses a gerund phrase as the subject, the singular verb helps, and the complete phrase narrow down their options.

× So try as much as they can help them to scope down their.

✓ Trying as many different things as they can helps them narrow down their options.

When an action functions as the subject of a sentence, use the -ing form. Trying is the subject of the verb helps in this sentence.

× So try as much as they can help them to scope down their.

✓ Trying as many different things as they can helps them narrow down their options.

The subject Trying as many different things is treated as singular, so it must take the singular verb helps, not help.