机会— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Answer the question directly and use more natural vocabulary and grammar. “Had an ambition to play in an amusement park” is unnatural; say “wanted to visit an amusement park” or “was eager to try new activities.” Also, “go to an amusement park” is more appropriate than “play in an amusement park.” Add one specific activity and explain why you enjoyed it. Use a linking word such as “For example” to connect the detail.

範例: Yes, I had several opportunities to try new activities as a child. For example, my friends and I used to visit an amusement park every summer, where we tried different rides and games. I really enjoyed it because it was exciting and gave me the chance to spend time with my friends.

建議: Give a clear opinion in the first sentence and avoid unclear or incorrect phrases such as “live they cope,” “he only lived once,” “invest in everything,” and “leave the moment.” Use “we only live once,” “step out of our comfort zone,” and “make the most of the moment.” The answer should contain one or two logical reasons and a specific example. Avoid disconnected imperatives such as “Always think positive”; connect your ideas with “because,” “for example,” or “as a result.”

範例: Yes, I think people should try different things because it helps them discover their interests and become more confident. For example, someone who is afraid of public speaking could join a debate club and gradually overcome that fear. However, people should take sensible risks rather than trying everything without considering the consequences.

× Yes, people must take risks and live they cope which is he only lived once, so he must try to get out of your comfort zone.

✓ Yes, people must take risks and live as if they only live once, so they must try to get out of their comfort zones.

The original sentence contains an incomplete and incorrectly connected structure: live they cope which is. Use the conjunction as if to introduce the comparison, and organize the sentence with a clear subject and verb. The correction also uses people consistently as the subject of the sentence.

× Yes, people must take risks and live they cope which is he only lived once, so he must try to get out of your comfort zone.

✓ Yes, people must take risks and live as if they only live once, so they must try to get out of their comfort zones.

The phrase they cope which is does not form a meaningful grammatical connection. Use as if to express an imagined or figurative situation: live as if they only live once. Use so to show the result of taking risks.

× Yes, people must take risks and live they cope which is he only lived once, so he must try to get out of your comfort zone.

✓ Yes, people must take risks and live as if they only live once, so they must try to get out of their comfort zones.

The pronouns he and your do not agree with the plural subject people. Use they and their when referring to people in general. Maintaining consistent pronouns makes the sentence clearer and grammatically accurate.

× Yes, people must take risks and live they cope which is he only lived once, so he must try to get out of your comfort zone.

✓ Yes, people must take risks and live as if they only live once, so they must try to get out of their comfort zones.

The statement expresses a general idea, so use the present tense live rather than the past tense lived. General truths and common sayings are normally expressed in the present tense.

× Invest in everything that you can and leave the moment.

✓ Invest in everything that you can and live in the moment.

The standard expression is live in the moment, meaning to enjoy and focus on the present. The preposition in is required in this expression. Also, live is the appropriate verb here; leave changes the meaning.