机会— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Cần cải thiện tính rõ ràng, ngữ pháp và cú pháp. Trả lời nên bắt đầu bằng một câu chủ đề rõ ràng (ví dụ: Có/Không và lý do chính). Sau đó cung cấp 1–2 chi tiết cụ thể (ví dụ nguyên nhân, hoàn cảnh) và dùng từ nối đơn giản để mạch lạc (because, so, therefore). Chú ý chia thì quá khứ khi nói về thời thơ ấu và dùng danh từ/động từ phù hợp (opportunity, take part in activities, grow up, health). Giữ tối đa 3–4 câu để tự nhiên và hiệu quả.

範例: No, I didn’t have many opportunities to try new activities when I was a child because I grew up in a rural area with limited resources. For example, there were no clubs or classes nearby, so I couldn’t join sports teams or music lessons.

建議: Cần trả lời rõ ràng và sắp xếp luận điểm mạch lạc. Bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề nêu quan điểm (Yes, they should) rồi giải thích lý do cụ thể (ví dụ: learn new skills, discover interests). Dùng liên từ để nối ý (because, for example, therefore) và tránh lặp từ/tiếng lấp (umm). Thêm một ví dụ ngắn để minh họa. Giữ 2–3 câu ngắn gọn, đúng ngữ pháp và dùng từ vựng phù hợp (try new things, broaden horizons, gain experience).

範例: Yes, people should try as many different things as possible because it helps them gain new skills and discover their interests. For example, trying different hobbies or jobs can reveal talents someone didn’t know they had.

× I don't have any opportunity to take part in activity at a try because it's me. Grow up in my country, not health.

✓ I didn't have any opportunities to take part in activities when I was a child because I grew up in a country with poor healthcare.

The original sentences contain multiple structure and tense errors. Use past tense (didn't have, grew up) to match the time frame 'as a child'. 'Opportunity' should be plural 'opportunities' and 'activity' should be plural 'activities'. 'At a try' is incorrect and was removed; use 'when I was a child' to indicate time. 'It's me. Grow up in my country, not health.' is ungrammatical; replace with 'I grew up in a country with poor healthcare' to convey intended meaning. Suggestion: form one clear past-tense sentence, pluralize countable nouns, and express conditions with appropriate phrases (e.g., 'because I grew up in a country with poor healthcare').

× I agree because umm when when they are tried to know knowledge, umm general knowledge, general knowledge, reverie.

✓ I agree because when they try to learn, they gain general knowledge and new ideas.

The original mixes wrong verb forms and awkward wording. Use present simple 'try' to express general truth. 'Are tried to know' is incorrect; use 'try to learn'. Repeating 'general knowledge' is unnecessary. 'Reverie' is not appropriate in this context; use 'new ideas' or 'insights'. Suggestion: use concise verbs for general statements (present simple) and choose correct verbs for learning (learn, gain).