机会— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Cải thiện ngữ pháp và rõ ràng: sửa lỗi ngữ pháp (ví dụ: "had many chances" thay vì "had many changed"), loại bỏ từ lặp (ví dụ: một "which"), và cấu trúc câu rõ ràng hơn. Thêm câu chủ đề trực tiếp, rồi cung cấp 1–2 chi tiết cụ thể (ví dụ: môn thể thao nào, tôi tham gia câu lạc bộ nào) để câu trả lời tự nhiên và giàu thông tin hơn. Giữ tối đa 4-5 câu, dùng liên từ như "for example" hoặc "for instance" để nối ý.

範例: Yes. As a child I had many chances to try new activities. For example, I often played football with my classmates and joined a school drama club. These experiences were fun and helped me gain confidence and teamwork skills.

建議: Cải thiện phát âm/độ chính xác ngữ pháp và mở rộng ý cụ thể: sửa lỗi nhỏ ("so try" → "should try"), bắt đầu với câu chủ đề rõ ràng, rồi nêu lý do cụ thể và ví dụ ngắn. Sử dụng liên từ như "because" hoặc "for example" để liên kết ý. Tránh trả lời quá ngắn; thêm một chi tiết minh họa sẽ làm câu trả lời thuyết phục hơn.

範例: Yes, I believe people should try different activities because it helps build confidence and broaden knowledge. For example, learning a musical instrument taught me patience, while joining a debate club improved my speaking skills.

× When I was a kid I had many changed to to achieve different activities which which were so interesting and such as playing sport, joining our teams or something else.

✓ When I was a kid I had many chances to try different activities that were very interesting, such as playing sports, joining our teams, and other things.

The sentence has multiple structure problems: incorrect word choice ('changed' should be 'chances'), duplicated words ('to to', 'which which'), awkward relative clause ('which were so interesting and such as' is incorrect), and plural/word form errors ('sport' -> 'sports'). Also 'to achieve different activities' is unnatural; use 'to try different activities'. Improve by choosing correct vocabulary, removing duplicates, using 'such as' to introduce examples, and keeping parallel list items. Suggestions: replace 'changed' with 'chances', remove duplicate words, use 'try' instead of 'achieve', change 'which were so interesting' to 'that were very interesting', and use plural 'sports'.

× Honestly yes, I think people so try to do different activities which can improve their confidence and gain more knowledge.

✓ Honestly, yes, I think people should try different activities, which can improve their confidence and help them gain more knowledge.

The original uses 'so try' which is ungrammatical; 'should' is the appropriate modal to give advice. Also 'to do different activities' can be simplified to 'try different activities'. The relative clause is fine but improve clarity by adding 'help them' before 'gain more knowledge' for better flow. Suggestions: use modal 'should' for recommendations, add commas for clarity, and ensure pronoun reference ('them').