机会— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer is unclear and has grammatical errors. Start with a clear topic sentence that directly answers the question, then add one or two supporting details using linking words. Be specific about the activities you tried and how they made you feel. For example, correct grammar (e.g., “I was shy around water” → “I was shy of water”) and use simple past tense for childhood activities. Keep it within 3–4 sentences and avoid trailing off.

範例: I didn’t try many new physical activities as a child because I was shy of water and avoided swimming. However, I often went to the temple with my grandmother, which I enjoyed because it felt peaceful and helped me learn our family traditions. Those visits made me happy and taught me to appreciate quiet moments with relatives.

建議: Your response is vague and lacks clear structure. Give a direct opinion first, then support it with reasons and a brief example using linking words like “because” or “for example.” Avoid hesitations like “I don’t know.” Use precise vocabulary (e.g., “beneficial,” “experience,” “learn”). Keep it to 2–4 sentences.

範例: Yes, I think people should try many different things because new experiences help you learn about yourself and develop useful skills. For example, trying a new sport or hobby can improve confidence and teach teamwork. Therefore, it’s usually beneficial to step outside your comfort zone when possible.

× With a water shy, I have opportunities for go to temple with my grandmother that make me feel happy because I can

✓ Because I was afraid of water, I had the opportunity to go to the temple with my grandmother, which made me feel happy.

The original sentence has multiple errors: 'With a water shy' is ungrammatical and should be 'Because I was afraid of water' (incorrect adjective phrase). 'I have opportunities for go to temple' mixes present tense and incorrect verb form; it should be past tense 'I had the opportunity to go to the temple' to match 'as a child'. 'to go' requires 'to' plus base verb, and 'opportunity' is singular here. 'with my grandmother that make me feel happy' has a relative clause error: use 'which made me feel happy' to refer back to the whole action; verb tense should be past 'made' to match 'had'. Suggestion: use clear subject + past tense verb forms and proper relative pronoun 'which' for non-defining clause, and correct adjective phrase to express fear of water. Note: This correction addresses errors classified under 'Incorrect use of adjectives or adverbs' (ID 13) and also fixes tense consistency.

× I think people try different things if they can because some adventures that they felt more or I don't know if to explain this question.

✓ I think people should try different things when they can because they gain more from new experiences, although I'm not sure how to explain this question.

The original sentence has a broken structure: 'some adventures that they felt more' is ungrammatical and unclear, and 'I don't know if to explain this question' is incorrect infinitive usage. Use modal 'should' to express recommendation, and 'when they can' is a clearer condition. Replace 'some adventures that they felt more' with 'they gain more from new experiences' to convey intended meaning. 'I don't know how to explain this question' is the correct way to express uncertainty about explanation. This correction addresses sentence structure problems (ID 26) by reorganizing clauses, using appropriate modal verb and correct infinitive/relative structures.