机会— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Порада: Зосередьтеся на чіткому формулюванні основної думки й використанні зв’язних речень з логічними сполучниками. Уникайте граматичних помилок у часах та числах, конкретизуйте деталі (наприклад, коли і як часто ви займалися), та скоротіть відповіді до максимум 4–5 речень. Також замініть загальні фрази на точніші слова (наприклад, «athletics» замість «athletic»).

範例: Yes, I did. As a child I tried many activities—swimming, athletics and painting—because my school offered extracurricular lessons twice a week. I enjoyed swimming the most since it helped me stay fit and make friends, while painting developed my creativity. Although the lessons sometimes conflicted with homework, I learned time management as a result.

建議: Порада: Почніть із чіткої позиції, потім наведіть 1–2 конкретні причини або приклади, використовуючи зв’язки (for example, because, however). Уникайте розмовних скорочень («yeah») і нечітких фраз («a lot of different things»). Підкресліть користь пробування нового з конкретними результатами. Максимум 4 речення.

範例: Yes, I believe people should try different activities because it helps them discover interests and skills. For example, trying sports can improve health and team-working skills, while hobbies like cooking can boost creativity and confidence. Of course, you don’t need to try everything—focus on a few things you find enjoyable and meaningful.

× Yes, I did when I was a child. I have a lot of activities.

✓ Yes, I did when I was a child. I had a lot of activities.

The student used present tense 'have' but the context is past ('when I was a child'). Use past tense 'had' to match time reference. Suggestion: identify the time frame words (e.g., 'when I was') and make the verb tense consistent with past events.

× It was swimming, it was athletic and it was a painting, but it has a disadvantage that I had a lesson

✓ They were swimming, athletics and painting, but there was a problem: I only had one lesson.

Several issues: activities should be plural 'they were' not 'it was'; 'athletic' is an adjective, the noun 'athletics' or 'athletic activities' is needed; 'a painting' is odd — use 'painting' as an activity; 'has a disadvantage' mixes present tense and awkward phrasing. Also 'I had a lesson' needs clarification and past tense consistency. Suggestion: list activities using plural nouns and keep past tense for child experiences; use clearer phrasing like 'there was a problem' or 'the disadvantage was'.

× I think yeah because now in the world we have a lot of different things as we can so you should try all and find that you like

✓ I think so, because these days there are many different things we can try, so you should try different activities and find the ones you like.

Multiple tense and structure problems: 'now in the world' is awkward; use 'these days' or 'now' with 'there are' (there be issue + present tense). 'We have a lot of different things as we can' is ungrammatical; use 'there are many different things we can try'. 'Try all' is vague; use 'try different activities' and 'find the ones you like' (correct pronoun and plural). Suggestion: break into clearer clauses, use 'there are' for existence, and match plural forms with 'ones'.