机会— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and structured: start with a clear topic sentence, then give two specific examples with brief details, and finish with a short result. Reduce hesitations and filler words (umm, uh) and avoid repetition. Use linking words (for example, as a result) to make the response coherent. Aim for 3–4 sentences and include a concrete detail (what activities, what you learned).

範例: Yes. In primary school I had many opportunities to try new activities. For example, I joined sports teams and academic quizzes, which helped me improve teamwork and quick thinking. As a result, I became more confident and learned how to manage time during competitions.

建議: Give a direct opinion followed by two clear reasons with linking words and specific examples. Avoid fillers and vague phrases like "other things"; specify what knowledge or social benefits you mean. Keep the answer to 2–3 sentences and use vocabulary relevant to personal development and experience.

範例: Yes, I think people should try many different activities because it helps them learn new skills and discover interests. For instance, joining a music club taught me discipline, while volunteering improved my communication with different people.

× I got lot of opportunities such as playing games, taking part in various kinds of activities, umm, applying to different, uh, kind of quizzes, uh, exams, uh, and umm, uh, from that I can learn many things.

✓ I got a lot of opportunities such as playing games, taking part in various kinds of activities, applying to different kinds of quizzes and exams, and from that I learned many things.

The phrase 'lot of' needs the determiner 'a' (singular/plural agreement). 'Kind of' should be pluralized to match 'quizzes' as 'kinds' or better 'kinds of quizzes' or 'kinds of quizzes and exams'; here 'different kinds of quizzes and exams' is clearer. Also maintain consistent past tense: the student refers to childhood experiences, so 'can learn' should be 'learned'. Suggestion: use 'a lot of' for quantity, 'different kinds of' for variety, and keep verbs in past tense when describing past events.

× Yes, I, uh, think people should try, uh, many different things as they can, because by trying different types of thing, people gather a lot of, uh, information and knowledge about other, uh, uh, things.

✓ Yes, I think people should try as many different things as they can, because by trying different types of things people gather a lot of information and knowledge about other things.

The sentence mixes structures: use the standard expression 'as many ... as they can' to compare quantities (present general truth), so place 'as' before 'many'. 'Types of thing' should be pluralized to 'types of things'. Remove unnecessary commas and fillers. The present tense 'gather' is correct for general statements. Suggestion: use the fixed comparative structure 'as many ... as' and ensure nouns match plural forms when referring to multiple items.

× We get to know people better.

✓ We get to know people better.

This sentence is grammatically correct; 'people' is plural and matches the verb 'get'. No correction needed. Explanation: 'People' is the correct plural noun here and 'get to know' is appropriate for present general statements, so keep as is.

× We get to know, uh, some of other things, uh, better.

✓ We get to know some other things better.

The phrase 'some of other things' is incorrect; use 'some other things' to refer to additional items. Remove filler words and extra commas. Suggestion: use 'some other things' for clarity and correct plural noun usage.