机会— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Make your answer more direct and focused. Start with a clear topic sentence answering the question, then add one or two specific examples and a brief detail using linking words. Correct tense and grammar (use past simple for childhood) and avoid repetition.

範例: Yes, I had many opportunities to try new activities as a child. For example, my school offered art and music clubs, so I joined the painting club and learned basic techniques. This helped me become more creative and comfortable trying new things.

建議: Complete the answer with a clear reason and a specific example. Use linking words (for example, because, so) and correct phrasing (e.g., 'as many different things as possible'). Keep it concise—one topic sentence plus one supporting detail is enough.

範例: Yes, people should try as many different things as possible because it helps them develop new skills and discover interests. For example, learning a new language or sport can improve communication and confidence, so you may find a hobby or career path you enjoy.

× As a child, I have so many opportunities to play and take my time.

✓ As a child, I had so many opportunities to play and take my time.

The question asks about past experiences ('Did you have... as a child?'), so the student should use past tense. 'Have' is present tense; change to 'had' to match the past context. Suggestion: use past simple for completed past experiences.

× As a student also, I like playing with my friends and explore many things as a child.

✓ As a child, I also liked playing with my friends and exploring many things.

This sentence mixes present tense ('I like') with a past-time phrase ('as a child'). Use past tense 'liked' and the gerund 'exploring' to follow 'liked'. Also the time phrase 'as a child' should be placed clearly. Suggestion: keep tense consistent and use appropriate verb forms after verbs of preference (like + -ing).

× Yes, people should try many different things as they can because it can make your skill improve and also you can take

✓ Yes, people should try as many different things as they can because it can help improve their skills and also give them more experiences.

The phrase 'as they can' should follow 'try' as 'try as many... as they can' (word order). 'Can make your skill improve' is awkward: use 'help improve their skills' and keep pronouns consistent ('people' -> 'their'). The sentence was also incomplete; add a noun phrase like 'more experiences'. Suggestion: maintain correct comparative structure and consistent pronouns, and complete the sentence with a clear object.