机会— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Improve grammar and clarity: use past tense for childhood, correct subject-verb agreement, and finish the idea. Keep answer concise (max 5 sentences) with a clear topic sentence and one or two supporting details. Use linking words such as 'however' or 'later' to show change. Be specific about what activities you tried and the leadership role you mentioned.

範例: When I was a child I was quite introverted, so I didn’t take part in many new activities. However, as I grew older I became more confident and started joining clubs like the school debate team and the football club. Later I was even chosen as captain of the football team, which helped me develop leadership and communication skills.

建議: Make your opinion direct and support it with specific reasons. Use clearer linking words (for example, 'for instance', 'because', 'however') and avoid repetition. Keep sentences shorter and more organized: state your view, give one or two specific examples, and a short conclusion about benefits of trying new things.

範例: Yes, I believe people should try a variety of activities because it broadens their skills and experiences. For instance, when I was young I tried hiking and backpacking, which improved my fitness and confidence. Trying new things also helps people discover interests they might enjoy later in life.

× As a child I am very introvert child who don't like to participate that much in new activities but as I grow older I do participate in many things and also I am a captain which

✓ As a child I was a very introverted child who didn't like to participate much in new activities, but as I grew older I participated in many things and I also became a captain.

Errors: wrong adjective form 'introvert' should be 'introverted' (adjective form), tense inconsistencies (mixing present with past) and incorrect negation 'don't' with singular subject. Use past tense when talking about childhood. 'that much' is awkward; 'much' is enough. 'participate that much in' -> 'participate much in' or better 'participate in many activities'. 'I am a captain which' is incomplete; change to 'I also became a captain.' Suggestions: use correct adjective forms, keep tense consistent (past for past experiences), use 'didn't' for negation in past, and complete clauses with correct relative or connecting phrases.

× Yes, I think that people should try as many things as they can because life will give them many opportunity to do something which only required like if for example, if I say if I'm a young then I can do traveling, hiking and other stuff which youngsters mostly can do buzz but as I grow older I can't do that.

✓ Yes, I think that people should try as many things as they can because life will give them many opportunities to do things that are only required when you are young; for example, when I was young I could travel, go hiking and do other activities that young people commonly do, but as I grew older I couldn't do them.

Errors: 'opportunity' should be plural 'opportunities' (quantifier agreement). Awkward phrase 'to do something which only required' – needs correct relative clause and tense. Incorrect conditional phrasing 'if I say if I'm a young' and mixing present with past; use past 'when I was young' for past ability. Modal verbs: 'can' should change to 'could' when referring to past ability. 'do traveling' -> 'travel' or 'go traveling'; 'stuff' is informal, use 'activities'. 'buzz' is irrelevant. Suggestions: use correct plural nouns, form clear relative clauses ('things that are required' or 'activities typically done by young people'), keep tense consistent and use appropriate modals (could for past ability).