机会— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more direct and clear: start with a topic sentence that answers the question, then give one or two specific supporting details. Avoid vague phrases (e.g. “very special comment”) and grammar issues. Use linking words to connect ideas and keep responses within 3–4 sentences. For example, correct verb forms and articles, and clarify what made the day memorable.

範例: Yes. As a child I took part in annual kindergarten performances every year. The whole class prepared a short play and songs, and I remember feeling excited and nervous before going on stage. Because of those experiences I became more confident speaking in front of others.

建議: Good structure and ideas, but fix grammar and be more specific with examples. Use linking words (e.g. “for example,” “moreover”) and avoid repetition (“handling the handling”). Provide one concrete example and a short result or reason to strengthen the answer. Keep it to 2–4 sentences.

範例: Yes, I think people should try a variety of activities because it helps them learn new skills and become more resilient. For example, taking up public speaking classes can improve communication skills and reduce fear of presenting, which is useful later at work or school.

× So yeah, it was very memorable day that I had very special comment.

✓ So yeah, it was a very memorable day and I received very special comments.

Missing definite article before 'memorable day' and awkward phrasing 'that I had very special comment'. Use 'a' before singular count noun 'memorable day'. The clause should be clear: 'I received very special comments' or 'I had a very special moment/comment'. Also changed conjunction to 'and' for natural flow. Suggestion: Use 'a' or 'the' with singular countable nouns and restructure awkward clauses to use appropriate verbs like 'receive' for 'comments'.

× For example, new jobs or hobbies teach practical skills and make you better handling the handling challenges in the future.

✓ For example, new jobs or hobbies teach practical skills and make you better at handling challenges in the future.

Incorrect use of verb + noun phrase: 'better handling' is unnatural; the correct structure is 'better at handling'. Also 'the handling challenges' has an extra 'the' and repeated 'handling'. Removed duplicate and added preposition 'at' to link 'better' with the gerund 'handling'. Suggestion: Use 'better at' + verb-ing to express improvement in ability, and avoid repeating words.