机会— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more direct and natural: start with a clear topic sentence, correct tense and pronouns, and give one or two specific examples with brief details. Use linking words to connect ideas and avoid vague phrases like "especially a good thing." Keep it within 2–4 sentences.

範例: Yes, I did. When I was five my mother encouraged me to try different activities, so I looked at drawing classes and football. For example, I joined a drawing group for a year and learned basic shading and color mixing, which made me enjoy art more.

建議: Make your opinion clear and support it with a specific reason and an example. Use linking words such as "because," "for example," or "therefore." Avoid unclear expressions like "life just wants." Keep the answer concise and logical, 2–3 sentences ideally.

範例: Yes, they should, because trying new activities helps people discover their interests and build useful skills. For example, taking a short coding course taught me problem-solving skills that helped in my studies.

× I think I will say yes.

✓ I think I would say yes.

The student uses 'will' to express a present opinion. Use 'would' or simply 'I think so' to indicate a tentative response. 'Would' is more polite/ tentative when stating an opinion about a hypothetical question. Suggestion: Use 'I think I would say yes' or 'I think so.'

× I remember when I was 5 my mom told me that I can do whatever I want, especially a good thing.

✓ I remember when I was five my mom told me that I could do whatever I wanted, especially good things.

The sentence reports past speech ('my mom told me'), so the verb in the reported clause should shift to the past tense (backshift). 'Can' becomes 'could' and 'want' becomes 'wanted'. Also use the plural 'good things' or rephrase 'especially a good thing' to 'especially good things' for naturalness. Suggestion: Use backshift for reported speech and pluralize where appropriate.

× For example, I can decide to do drawing or play.

✓ For example, I could choose to draw or to play.

'Do drawing' is unnatural in English; use the verb 'draw' (base form) or the gerund 'drawing' with different structure ('do some drawing'). Also because the previous clause is in past reported speech, 'can' should be backshifted to 'could'. 'Decide to choose' is redundant; use 'choose to draw or play.' Suggestion: Use 'could choose to draw' or 'could do some drawing or play.'

× Yes, I think people should try different things to get more valuable experience in their life because I think life just wants, so it's better to explore more different things.

✓ Yes, I think people should try different things to gain more valuable experiences in their lives because life is uncertain, so it's better to explore a variety of things.

Problems here include awkward phrasing and tense/word choice. 'Get more valuable experience in their life' is better as 'gain more valuable experiences in their lives' (plural agreement and natural collocation). 'Life just wants' is ungrammatical and unclear; likely intended meaning is 'life is unpredictable' or 'life changes.' Also 'more different things' is awkward; use 'a variety of things.' Suggestion: Use clear collocations ('gain experience'), correct plural agreement, and replace unclear metaphors with standard expressions like 'life is unpredictable.'