机会— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer is relevant and gives personal detail, but it is slightly long, includes repetition (“taste a taste”), and has some grammatical inaccuracies (e.g. tense consistency and article use). To improve, shorten to a clear topic sentence, correct the repetition and grammar, and add one specific supporting detail using a linking word. Aim for 2–3 sentences, varied vocabulary (e.g. “boosted my confidence”, “competitive athletics”), and correct phrasing.

範例: Yes. In eighth grade I was selected for a school marathon because I was one of the fastest runners. Participating boosted my confidence and sparked my interest in competitive athletics.

建議: Good direct response with reasons and an example, but watch small grammar errors and awkward phrasing (“more adapt”). Improve coherence by using linking words (e.g. “for instance,” “in addition”) and a stronger concluding phrase. Keep it within 2–3 sentences and use more precise vocabulary like “adaptable” or “versatile.”

範例: Yes, I believe people should try many different things because new activities provide valuable experience and help you develop transferable skills. For instance, trying different hobbies or jobs can broaden your horizons and make you more adaptable in future careers.

× it gave me confidence and taste a taste for competitive sport.

✓ it gave me confidence and a taste for competitive sport.

Missing article 'a' before 'taste' makes the noun phrase incorrect; 'a taste' is the correct singular collocation. Add 'a' to make the noun phrase grammatically correct and natural.

× make you more adapt in the future, I think.

✓ make you more adaptable in the future, I think.

The adjective 'adapt' is a verb; the correct adjective form meaning 'able to adapt' is 'adaptable'. Using 'adaptable' modifies 'you' properly. Alternatively 'more able to adapt' could be used.

× I had a chance to take part in a marathon race and I was chosen because I was one of the fastest runners at school and I really enjoyed the experience, it gave me confidence and taste a taste for competitive sport.

✓ I had a chance to take part in a marathon race; I was chosen because I was one of the fastest runners at school, and I really enjoyed the experience. It gave me confidence and a taste for competitive sport.

The original is a run-on sentence with comma splicing and lack of proper sentence boundaries. Split into shorter sentences and use appropriate punctuation (';' or '.') and a coordinating conjunction with a comma to fix structure and clarity. Also corrected 'taste a taste' and added article 'a'.

× Yes, I think people should try as many different things as possible because each new activity gives them valuable experience and helps them develop new skills.

✓ Yes, I think people should try as many different things as possible, because each new activity gives them valuable experience and helps them develop new skills.

While grammatically acceptable, adding a comma before 'because' improves readability by separating the main clause and the reason clause. This aligns with natural spoken pauses and clarifies clause boundaries.

× For example, trying different hobbies or jobs can broaden your horizons and make you more adapt in the future, I think.

✓ For example, trying different hobbies or jobs can broaden your horizons and make you more adaptable in the future, I think.

Repeated sentence corrected similarly: 'more adapt' is incorrect because 'adapt' is not an adjective; 'adaptable' is the correct adjective form. Keeps tense and meaning appropriate.