机会— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Reduce hesitations and minor grammar errors, use clearer sentence structure and linking words. Begin with a direct topic sentence, then add one specific example with concise details and a linking word. Correct verb forms and pluralization (e.g., ‘signed me up for music lessons and swimming courses’) and improve phrasing (‘gain confidence in social situations’).

範例: Yes. My parents often encouraged me to try new activities, so I had many opportunities to explore different interests. For example, they signed me up for music lessons and swimming courses, which helped me develop hobbies and gain confidence in social situations.

建議: Make your response more grammatically accurate and specific. Start with a clear opinion, then give a reason with a linking word (e.g., ‘because’), and finish with a concrete example. Fix errors like ‘it's help’ → ‘it helps’ and unclear phrases such as ‘new passing’. Use precise vocabulary like ‘new passions’ or ‘new skills’.

範例: Yes, I believe people should try many different activities because it helps them discover new passions and skills. For example, joining a drama club or taking a photography course can introduce you to new interests and friends, making life more enjoyable.

× For example, they signed me for music lesson or swimming course which helped me try different hobbies and gain confidence in social.

✓ For example, they signed me up for music lessons or a swimming course, which helped me try different hobbies and gain confidence in social situations.

Incorrect use of verb patterns and missing noun forms: 'signed me for' is incorrect; the correct phrasal verb is 'signed me up for'. 'music lesson' should be plural 'music lessons' or 'a music lesson' and 'swimming course' needs an article 'a'. 'in social' is incomplete; use the noun phrase 'in social situations'. Use of commas improves sentence clarity.

× Oh yes, I think people should try as many different things as possible because it's help them discover new hobbies and interests.

✓ Oh yes, I think people should try as many different things as possible because it helps them discover new hobbies and interests.

Subject-verb agreement with modal/auxiliary construction: 'it's help' is incorrect because 'it' (it = this/that idea) requires the verb in present simple 'helps' to agree with the singular subject. Alternatively, using 'it will help' would change the meaning. Use 'helps' for a general present-tense statement.

× For example, joining a club or taking a short course might lead to new passing or new friends which makes life more enjoyable.

✓ For example, joining a club or taking a short course might lead to new pastimes or new friends, which makes life more enjoyable.

Word choice error: 'new passing' is not correct English; the intended word is likely 'pastimes' (hobbies/activities). Also add a comma before the relative clause for readability. Ensure plurality/word form matches context: 'pastimes' and 'friends' are countable plural nouns.