机会— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more specific and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two concrete examples with brief details using linking words. Avoid repetition ("opportunities" repeated) and correct small grammar issues (e.g. "I was presented with opportunities" or "I had opportunities to showcase my skills, such as oral reading and listening activities").

範例: Yes. I had many chances to try new activities as a child. For example, my school held weekly storytelling and listening clubs, where I practiced oral reading and comprehension. These activities improved my confidence and helped me become a better public speaker.

建議: Make your answer more natural by using a clear topic sentence followed by 1–2 supporting reasons linked with connectors. Reduce redundancy ("different skills" and "experience" overlap). Use concise phrasing and correct small grammar: "it also shows" rather than "it also reflects" and avoid repeating "several/things."

範例: Yes, people should try a variety of activities because it helps them develop new skills and broaden their experience. For instance, learning a musical instrument and joining a debate club taught me discipline and improved my communication, which can be useful in many situations.

× I was presented various opportunities to showcase my skills, whether it be oral reading, listening.

✓ I was presented with various opportunities to showcase my skills, whether it was oral reading or listening.

Missing preposition: 'presented' when used in passive requires the preposition 'with' ('presented with opportunities'). Verb tense/person agreement in the clause 'whether it be' is awkward with past context; change to 'whether it was' to match past tense. Also use 'or' to join the two examples. Suggestion: always include necessary prepositions after verbs (e.g., 'presented with') and keep subordinate clause tense consistent with main clause. Grammar problem type ID:11

× People should try as many different things as they can to gain different skills, experience and it also reflects diversity and the eagerness to learn several things.

✓ People should try as many different things as they can to gain different skills and experience; it also reflects diversity and an eagerness to learn.

Sentence structure and parallelism: in a list, maintain parallel structure ('skills and experience' rather than 'skills, experience and it also reflects...'). The final part 'the eagerness' should be indefinite 'an eagerness' and avoid repeating 'several things' which is redundant. Use a semicolon or separate sentence to join related independent clauses. Suggestion: keep list items parallel and avoid unnecessary repetition; use correct articles ('an eagerness'). Grammar problem type ID:26