机会— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be direct and use past tense for childhood experiences. Remove fillers (uh, umm), give a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Focus on natural phrasing and correct grammar (e.g., "I took part in" or "I used to take part in").

範例: Yes. I often took part in social activities when I was a child because my parents encouraged volunteer work. For example, I helped organize charity drives and visited elderly people, which taught me responsibility and empathy.

建議: Answer directly, avoid repetition, correct grammar (use plural/singular and verb forms), and use linking words to connect reasons. Provide one clear reason with a brief example or result. Keep it to 2–3 sentences for clarity.

範例: Yes, people should try a range of activities because it builds confidence and creativity. For instance, trying sports and arts can improve teamwork and problem-solving skills, which helps in both personal and professional life.

× Yes, uh, if I have some opportunities then I will take part, umm, in social activities cause uh, from my childhood I love to do social work.

✓ Yes, if I have the opportunity, I will take part in social activities, because I have loved doing social work since my childhood.

Present tense and aspect errors: 'if I have some opportunities then I will' is awkward; use 'the opportunity' or 'opportunities' consistently. 'Cause' is informal; use 'because'. 'From my childhood I love to do social work' mixes present simple with a time starting in the past; use present perfect 'have loved' or 'have been doing' with 'since my childhood' to show continuity. Also remove filler words and fix article use ('the opportunity'). Suggestions: use 'if I have the opportunity' or 'if I have opportunities' and 'I have loved doing social work since my childhood.'

× Yes, people should do different type of thing as they can because.

✓ Yes, people should try as many different things as they can because

Wrong quantifier and noun form: 'different type of thing' is incorrect. Use the quantifier 'as many' with the plural noun 'things' to express variety. Also 'do' can be replaced by 'try' for naturalness. Keep 'as they can' to complete the comparative structure. Suggestion: use 'try as many different things as they can.'

× It's make them more confident and more creative by doing different type of thing.

✓ It makes them more confident and more creative by trying different types of things.

Subject-verb agreement and noun form errors: 'It's make' is incorrect; the singular subject 'it' requires 'makes'. 'Different type of thing' should be pluralized: 'different types of things' or better 'different things'. Also use 'trying' (gerund) after 'by' to show the means. Suggestion: 'It makes them more confident and more creative by trying different things.'